heres the line "The graceful feeling of your hand, and adorable laugh that I love"
you can switch it around if you would like, but please give me that will make sense and rhyme with it!!! thank you, all help appreciated
2007-07-26 14:09:17 · 10 answers · asked by winengold23 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Sounds fine the way it is! Rhyme around it if you must!
Sorry if that's not helpful, but I genuinely like it.
2007-07-26 14:14:25 · answer #1 · answered by Julie 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
First, it doesn't have to rhyme.
This is what's cool about your lines. They are already more original than what most people write when they sit down to write a love poem. You've already pulled out to non-cliche things that you like about this girl. She's going to really like this.
Maybe just restucture a bit:
The graceful feeling of your hand
The adorable laugh that I love
(put in some more qualities and then in your own words something like this).
These are just a few of the many things that...
(choices for you could be: that make you so special, that I love about you, etc)
Speak from the heart. If the rhymes come fine. If they don't don't stress about it. Speak from the heart and you will likely win her heart (if she likes you--it's not magic man lol)
Best of luck. You are off to a great start honestly.
2007-07-26 15:13:06 · answer #2 · answered by Todd 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
If you're seriously talking to a girl you like just say how you feel. You can go by some stranger's suggestion just because it rhymes. It doesn't need to necessarily be a poem as much as a nice letter that she knows comes from you. If it comes from one of us anonymous people it means nothing
2007-07-26 18:27:56 · answer #3 · answered by Art Vandelay 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
that's a sprint common. it is okay, yet she could think of it is in basic terms a pretend element. For the lacking section, some thing like this according to probability. Your love is looming like the sky, Your eyes the sparkling moon, Your hair the sunlight on thrones up intense, Your lips a pink balloon it is not an analogous rhyme scheme or rhythm, yet I easily like it extra suitable. Your poem is okay. try some revision.
2016-10-09 10:17:32 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The graceful feeling of your hand
and adorable laugh that I love
mean more to me than wealth or land
though it's something I seldom speak of
2007-07-29 20:22:26 · answer #5 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The graceful feeling of your hand,
the adorable laugh I love,
Your sweet beaming smile
As peaceful as a dove...
2007-07-26 14:24:19 · answer #6 · answered by Kira 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Hello 'winengold23' :
I'm only trying to help, so, don't get too critical.
The comfy feeling of your hand,
And the laugh I love !
I know that God sent you to me,
Right from heav'n above.
Good Luck !
2007-07-26 14:25:33 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Maybe this, just trying to help,..............
The graceful feeling of your hand, and adorable laugh that i love
Now i discover that your're an angel, and so i know you came from above
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2007-07-26 14:58:09 · answer #8 · answered by Tamalez 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Your adorable laugh is music to my ear;
The graceful touch of your hand vanish all my fear..
2007-07-26 14:21:06 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
it makes me soar in joy in time, to realize I'm loving much
JUST A POSSIBLILITY!
GOOD LUCK... THERE ARE FEW PEOPLE WHO DARE WRITE POETRY NOWADAYS!
2007-07-28 17:30:57 · answer #10 · answered by Calíope!* 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋