...offers a superior method for dry cleaning using natural liquid carbon dioxide instead of traditional, toxic chemicals like perchloroethylene. It's better for your clothes and the earth. Besst of all, its priced comparable to other full service cleaners. Com clean, with revolution.
2007-07-26 10:56:15 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Absolutely yes. The only necessary one is the one after "Best of all". All the others are superfluous. Trust me.
2007-07-26 11:38:09 · answer #1 · answered by teacher93514 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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Try this for comma usage.
...offers a superior method for dry cleaning using natural liquid carbon dioxide instead of traditional toxic chemicals, like perchloroethylene. It's better for your clothes and the earth. Best of all, its priced comparable to other full service cleaners. Come clean, with revolution.
However, the word "It's" int he 2nd and 3rd sentence must be defined.
2007-07-26 17:59:44 · answer #2 · answered by k 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Constructive criticism here: there should not be a comma between "traditional" and "toxic". The pause doesn't make sense or sound right. Or a comma between "clean" and "with". Maybe a period.
you may have been in a hurry, but I'm surprised that you correctly spelled, "perchloroethylene", but near nothing else correctly.
2007-07-26 18:07:51 · answer #3 · answered by hell hath no fury 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The first part is fine, but for the end, I would try this:
"Best of all, its price is comparable to other full service cleaners. Come clean with revolution."
I'm assuming you just typed these words incorrectly, but you do have several spelling mistakes.
2007-07-26 18:47:42 · answer #4 · answered by bookgirlocmd 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It doesn't look like it has too many commas to me. All the commas are used correctly. You need to spell check in a couple of places though.
2007-07-26 17:59:45 · answer #5 · answered by Michelle S 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
few spelling errors .. i would take out the last comma from Come clean with revolution. other wise it sounds good
2007-07-26 17:59:16 · answer #6 · answered by Chelsea S 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nope, perfect amount of commas. Maybe you don't need one between clean and with, but it doesn't matter either way.
2007-07-26 17:59:15 · answer #7 · answered by Anony 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
No, but the spelling needs some correction.
2007-07-26 17:59:26 · answer #8 · answered by ruralsouthwell 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Not too many commas but several words are mispelled.
2007-07-26 17:58:27 · answer #9 · answered by TAT 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
The only one you need is after "best of all".
2007-07-26 17:59:33 · answer #10 · answered by Nashville Guy 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋