a flick of light ignited a wick and illuminates her whole life. she fixed her stare and gazed blankly with thoughts that seemed so far away...
she brought her hands near the flame, felt its warmth.. played around with the melted candle wax which burnt her fingertips, a pinch of pain that ended soon enough before she could even remember the feeling that it brought her.
her sight starts to blur, as her light slowly hypnotizes her...
.....
crackling sounds that weren't supposed to be there filled her ears. a glint of bright orange forced her weary eyes to widen up. tongues of fire were licking the wooden furniture, crawling up the curtains. the flick of light that once illuminated her, starts to take her over. warm... hot... burning. the exit appears to be as clear as it can be. despite the scene that plays before her very eyes, no further action was made. she stayed fixed on her spot. never even dared to move a muscle. not even a strike of fear could be seen in her innocent eyes. she burnt herself to death. a twitch of a muscle left on her face that may have resembled a smile..
she was trapped within, or yet, she trapped herself. swallowed within the flames that once granted her the passion that's all she had ever asked for. gulped down by his fire... to her, his warmth... her so-called fireplace... his inferno...
2007-07-24 18:18:16 · 7 answers · asked by psychedelic fur 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
this isnt really a poem.. but i hope ud share wat you think about it.. each sentences signifies something.. u may see it in ur own point of view..
thx for ur time.. your opinions would help a lot to improve my writing..
2007-07-24 18:20:00 · update #1
and anyway.. the title is "Inferno"
2007-07-24 18:20:30 · update #2
Nice! You have talent in the writing department!
2007-07-24 18:22:22 · answer #1 · answered by SCSA 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is a wonderful story,
it does signify warmth from the candle
and hypnosis from it.
I am also sensing she is doing some reminiscing
2007-07-25 05:28:57 · answer #2 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Okay...time for a cold shower...she stares at a candle and has an erotic fantasy that consumes her...not going to comment on all the details...but I'm pretty sure I got your meaning...now, off to the showers....good prose though :)
2007-07-27 18:58:27 · answer #3 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i dont think , i dont get paid to do so , but i know that you are a very sensual , if not seductive person and i really do enjoy the writing . marvelous texture if you ask me .
2007-07-31 09:50:38 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a short story , and its good . most poets set there mark by writing shorts . its good . keep it up.
i love the way you write. the way you put the reader there .
cool , fur
jethro
2007-07-25 09:36:20 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good story, fire as a lover is a different twist!
2007-07-28 15:42:22 · answer #6 · answered by book writer 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That was nice to read....thanx.
2007-07-24 18:23:15 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋