I need help with this paragraph:
Finding Ibu was no easy task as I lumbered across the room. She was busy preparing an early Malaysian lunch for us consisting of: rendang, lemang(“…they are glutinous rice with lemon, Alice.”), ketupat (“Malay rice dumpling, dear.”), dodol (“Haven’t you tasted it before? It’s a sticky and sweet rice flour snack), rojak (“Alice, you ask too many questions. Rojak is a Malaysian fruit salad that uses a spicy sauce. I’ve added peanuts and shrimp paste.”), and nasi lemak which was rice served with fishcake, anchovies, egg, and spicy sambal sauce.
Is it possible that I can include a direct speech/quote into a bracket as Ibu describes the Malay food to Alice?
2007-07-23 19:08:04 · 4 answers · asked by little zebulon 4 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
After lunch for us, put a period. Then have Alice ask, "What are these things, Ibu?"and have Ibu respond, "Well, the rendang is such& such; (semicolons after each description)...with period & " at the end.
2007-07-23 19:12:28 · answer #1 · answered by embroidery fan 7 · 1⤊ 2⤋
As a stylistic exercise I like it.
Not sure if a nit picker would approve the technique, but the meaning is clear and the flow is good.
(You missed the quote marks after snack though, and I think commas are required after Ketupat, dodol, and rojak.)
Drat, now I'm getting hungry.
2007-07-23 20:05:45 · answer #2 · answered by Irv S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is how I used to write before getting help. Most people don't follow sentences that long with that many pauses and clauses. You really need to find a way to break it up into shorter statements so it's easier to read. I'm not sure if you can technicaly use quotes like that, but it's not worth it even if you can. It's cluttery.
2007-07-23 19:24:59 · answer #3 · answered by Zyndro 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Capitalize nouns you dumb as s!
2007-07-23 19:16:08 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋