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Question

According to the textbook, the Neolithic Revolution has caused several dramatic developments that have changed the nature of human existence. The introduction to agriculture encouraged the formation of larger as well as more stable human communities. This allowed many people to settle more permanently in one area. With better food supplies and a “more settled existence,” agricultural people could afford to build better houses and villages. As agricultural farming became more elaborate, the need for new tools sprang. Soon, the invention of the potter’s wheel came into existence around 6000 B.C.E. Eventually, this in turn, encouraged faster and higher-quality pottery production. The need for even higher quality tools came around 4000 B.C.E, where the use of metalworking became commonplace after the Neolithic Revolution. These newly found inventions freed many people from the community for specialized jobs and activities. As farming evolved, new animals were also domesticated. ....

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. Farmers used these animals for meats and skins and soon discovered dairying as well. Overall, the developments that occurred after the Neolithic Revolution mainly included the domestication of human beings from ‘barbarians’ to citizens.

Answer 1

According to the textbook, the Neolithic Revolution has caused several dramatic developments that have changed the nature of human existence. The introduction to agriculture encouraged the formation of larger as well as more stable human communities. This allowed many people to settle more permanently in one area. With better food supplies and a “more settled existence,” agricultural people could afford to build better houses and villages. As agricultural farming became more elaborate, the need for new tools CAME ABOUT. Soon after came the invention of the potter’s wheel came into existence; around 6000 B.C.E to be more precise. Eventually, this (THIS WHAT? the invention of the potter's wheel, all the new tools???)FACILITATED faster and higher-quality pottery production. The need for even higher quality tools came around 4000 B.C.E, where the use of metalworking became commonplace after the Neolithic Revolution. (PREVIOUS SENTENCE IS AKWARD AND SHOULD BE REWORDED)These newly found inventions freed many people from the community (SOUNDS LIKE YOU"RE SAYING THEY WERE FREED FROM THE COMMUNITY, LIKE THE COMMUNITY WAS HOLDING THEM HOSTAGE)for specialized jobs and activities. As farming evolved, new animals were also domesticated. (MAYBE NAME SOME OF THE ANIMALS)Farmers used these animals for meats and skins. WITH THE DOMESTICATION OF THE COW CAME ...........(WHAT IS DAIRYING). Overall, through all the developments that occurred after the Neolithic Revolution Homosapiens developed from "barbarians" to citizens.

Answer 2

I'm not sure what you're hoping for with your question. It's not fabulous writing, but it's perfectly understandable, and the only real grammar problem I see is with the use of the word "sprang." That seems to be a poor word choice. Another somewhat strange phrase is "freed many people from the community for..." I think I would rephrase that one, as it seems rather awkward.