She doesn't give a damn
Where I come from or who I am
She doesn't want to know that I'm alive
I'm just a stranger she has to live with
Part of someone else's plan
She never says a word
Unless she has to.
I look at her
She looks away
She's trying hard
To drive me away.
I'm not leaving.
No one says she has to be nice
So she's gonna keep playin' it cold as ice
No one says she has to be nice
So she's gonna keep playin' it cold as ice
If I could do magic for a night
I'd take what's wrong and make it right
I'd do anything I could to make it better
I'd go out of my way to please her
Try to show her that I care
It's like lookin' in a mirror
And finding there's nothing there.
I look at her
She looks away
She's trying hard
To drive me away
I'm not leaving.
No one says she has to be nice
So she's gonna keep playin' it cold as ice
No one says she has to be nice
So she's gonna keep playin' it cold as ice.
2007-07-21 10:02:12 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I put it in lyrics, but I also want a feel of what poets might think. Thanks.
2007-07-21 10:03:04 · update #1
Am I supposed to say that I WROTE these, or is that ASSUMED?
2007-07-21 10:07:26 · update #2
Please (lol), I am no poet....
I wrote one poem, when I was nine:
Feet are ugly with their bumps and their bruises.
Feet are ugly; thank God for shoeses.
(lol)
2007-07-21 10:36:01 · update #3
I think it's a well written song. Clearly written from either a parent's or older guardian sibling's perspective to their child (at least that's what I get from the following lines):
I'm just a stranger she has to live with
Part of someone else's plan
It's like lookin' in a mirror
And finding there's nothing there.
Normally, in a poem the chorus would be too predictable but I think it works in a song very well.
I like the pathos in this sequence:
If I could do magic for a night
I'd take what's wrong and make it right
I'd do anything I could to make it better
I'd go out of my way to please her
Try to show her that I care
It's fairly straight-forward, but has a universal tone that many could relate to on both sides of this dynamic.
With the right music, it could be good.
(I thought you always claimed you weren't a poet).
2007-07-21 10:11:26 · answer #1 · answered by Todd 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I liked it. I write poetry myself and as long as it speaks to YOU on a level YOU understand that should be all that matters. I would say the person in the poem is a little sad kind of that melancholy feeling you get sometimes, bordering on sad and nostalgic. Anyway I thought it was great!
2007-07-21 10:24:49 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice poetry..excellent imagery
2007-07-21 10:15:31 · answer #3 · answered by Zombie Birdhouse 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think you are a pretty good poet.Keep writing and you will have you picture on a back of your book someday.
2007-07-21 10:16:00 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. these are so good i wouldnt be showing them on yahoo. Quick! get it copywrote
2007-07-21 12:30:35 · answer #5 · answered by The Answernator 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
make a great song
2007-07-21 10:10:38 · answer #6 · answered by luminous 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Thats very nice!!! You've got talent kid! Keep it up!!!!!!!
Oh I thought YOU wrote it! LOL
2007-07-21 10:07:18 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
well where ever they came from they are of the chain
2007-07-21 10:10:10 · answer #8 · answered by Mz.Swag 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like them!
2007-07-21 10:06:41 · answer #9 · answered by Kbr 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its pretty good lyrics
2007-07-21 10:05:58 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋