If not you…
If not you…
If not you…life’s tough
If not with you,
My love…
I can’t even die
I get no sleep
If not you
If not you…life’s restiess
Pining…
Over whelms me…
Every moment, I swear
Last night…
In my dreams…
I have seen your, my love
Laughter…
Sounds like a wail
If it isn’t you finding…
Is like losing…
If I can’t find you
In memories, I was lost…
All night I could not go to sleep?
Loneliness… gnaws…
I have no one but barren
If not with you appear to be barren,
If not with you
This moment seems frozen,
If not with you
comment are welcome. thanks for reading.
2007-07-20 12:21:18 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
i know the grammer is not good but its not writen in english and the person who translated it is not from america but another country and his english is not good.
2007-07-20 12:32:46 · update #1
Sounds like one desperate writer, and I hope no one would ever write that for me. They sound needy as the dickens, or just hopelessly "in love", which isn't much better. Of course, I'm interpreting that poem as a retired mental health professional with 20+ years experience, so, maybe I'm just not emotional enough. God Bless you.
2007-07-20 12:31:10 · answer #1 · answered by ? 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
My age is 57. No one had ever written a song for any cause thinking me. I am still a bachelor. If a beautiful, well educated, sensible real virgin happen to write like this to me, it will be really admirable and lovable. I don't think that I will get a chance like this at this age.
2007-07-21 04:47:50 · answer #2 · answered by Raja 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Don't worry what other people think
although I see alot of heartache
as well as worries
In memories I was lost
it is like as if its in memory of someone
All night I could not sleep
that is like as if there were tears
2007-07-21 12:27:33 · answer #3 · answered by sweet_blue 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would rather be in a relationship where the person (writing me this) didn't seem so "needy"
It is a good poem... But I would feel smothered...
"If not with you appear to be barren" --- They can't reproduce without the other person???? That is kinda creepy to me...
It is a sweet gesture, but a bit overwhelming...
2007-07-20 19:31:59 · answer #4 · answered by Mom 4 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Greetings,
I'm a poet as well and I think and feel that poetry is from the heart and soul. It's pretty good you should keep writing.
Keep up the good work!!!
2007-07-20 21:21:07 · answer #5 · answered by Native American Girl 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would be flattered! I like poems like this.They are kind of sad and haunting.What country was the person who wrote this from?
Thanks for sharing!
2007-07-20 23:57:36 · answer #6 · answered by E. 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
If someone wrote this for me...honestly, I would get a restraining order.
2007-07-20 19:33:50 · answer #7 · answered by Todd 7 · 4⤊ 0⤋
I would feel touched but then I wonder if they had issues with spelling and grammar.
2007-07-20 19:25:21 · answer #8 · answered by Jenn 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
First flattered, then think he was WAY to needy, and distance myself from him in fear that he will become more obsessive.
2007-07-20 19:25:12 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
if you wrote this to me i would be on my way to your house right now
2007-07-21 12:26:46 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋