Can you help me write this card better?
ok, i write :
wake your fantasies,
follow your passions,
realise your dreams
live in love.
Open pathways to your visionary destination
using all the opportunities and living all the moments.
And if someone get hurt or disappointed, without your conscious will,
then remember: YOU HAVE ONLY ONE LIFE TO LIVE.
please elp me make it as perfect as possible. It is for a very important person. thanks
2007-07-18 22:38:46 · 6 answers · asked by kittana! 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
I love it, basically because you wrote it, and I can tell that you're a good writer. You therefore needn't change anything except this:
"And if someone get hurt..."
TO
"And if PEOPLE get hurt..."
Very good. You should do much more of this...
2007-07-22 19:29:27 · answer #1 · answered by M O R P H E U S 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Wake up your fantasies
follow your passions
live with love
live in the moment
realise your dreams
without hurting anyone
remember
YOU HAVE ONLY ONE LIFE TO LIVE.
2007-07-18 22:50:01 · answer #2 · answered by Subhash N 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
honey, u've tried the lads, now how some brainy gals'? after all, u prefer to electrify a girl, oughtn't u to ask females insteada blokes? *shaking head* look in any respect those lame solutions above...tsk. what i like to place in writing whilst i'm in that temper is... right it extremely is a card to somebody who's witty, clever, appealing, relaxing, and fully vital to humankind...yet, adequate approximately me! (then on the different element of the cardboard, write, right here) right here is to somebody who's all that and greater! satisfied BIRTHDAY!
2016-10-19 06:04:17 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's already perfect because it came from your heart. If it came from anyone else's head it would be meaningless. It doesn't have to be or sound perfect. No art is perfect. Thats why it's called art. It sounds good.
2007-07-18 22:45:52 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
I agree that if it is from your heart it is fine, but I would add that grammatically:
"realise" should be "realize"
and
"if someone get hurt" should be "if someone gets hurt"
In the end, these are minor, though.
2007-07-18 23:01:24 · answer #5 · answered by Think 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Rampant is right. It's lovely just the way it is.
2007-07-18 22:47:46 · answer #6 · answered by nanaj 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋