Born to fly (if I were)
If I had wing I could fly if I had wings I would be free to go places and explore I see the sky and wonder why we don't have wing to fly I feel I was born to Fly If I were and angel I could save lives cause I was born to fly When the day is done and darkness falls I watch as the eagles Fly and Ask God why I don't have wing cause I was born to fly
What do you think
2007-07-18 14:02:06 · 7 answers · asked by Karie 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
no im not high just spiritual
2007-07-18 14:11:22 · update #1
I let my soul do the writing and it speeks for itself
2007-07-18 14:12:53 · update #2
Nice. Obviously your spirit does fly.
2007-07-18 14:05:29 · answer #1 · answered by the Boss 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It's good. It has a few rough spots, which would be more apparent if you separated it into verse form, ending and beginning lines rather than a running block of prose. How could an angel save lives? What would you explore in flight? You could take out a bit of the repetition, yet expand your poem to tell more and ask more questions. You have a good feel and beginning.
2007-07-18 22:00:56 · answer #2 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I couldn't really read that 'cause it's display or whatever is so off. I don't know when the stance ends, or where it begins... I don't know if I should be pronoucing it 'wings' or 'wing', as you have it throughout most of, if not all of the poem... I think only once I see it with a plural...
I just can't comment on it 'cause from this angle, if you will, it has no flow, some feeling, but it's really hard to get...
I think if I could read it, I would like it...
2007-07-18 21:54:44 · answer #3 · answered by Twili 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Listen to this song about a snow bird!!!!
http://singshot.com/playPerformance.html?performanceId=yQ4zRMOIA7A%3D&play=Y
2007-07-18 21:06:17 · answer #4 · answered by winter_new_hampshire 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Awesome, I like it alot!KeEp W*r*I*t*T*i*N*g!
2007-07-18 21:41:07 · answer #5 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
are you high?
2007-07-18 21:09:56 · answer #6 · answered by nobody knows 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
:')
beautiful!!!
2007-07-18 21:05:29 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋