I look at you,
As you look at me,
You look so happy,
It hurts me.
You once loved me,
But that love's past,
You found new love,
That will always last.
You tried so hard,
But I said no,
Afraid to let,
My feelings show
I loved you to,
And will forever,
Even though,
you now love her better.
You said you loved me,
Now you dont.
Will I give up?
No I won't.
Even though you love her,
You once felt that for me.
And if it kills me,
I will make you see.
You will always feel,
Like you felt that time.
Deep down in your heart,
you will always be mine.
You still have that love,
Once expressed from you,
I still have my love,
and will always love you to.
and i no this will really never happens cause we going out for 9 months and i love him to death lol
2007-07-17 04:26:58 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
yes i am still happily with him anf forever i shall be lol
2007-07-17 04:41:52 · update #1
this the first copy i did that is why and it is in my notebook full of poems so this is what i wrote
2007-07-17 04:56:47 · update #2
i no there is spelling msitakes and what not but it is the first copy!!!!
2007-07-17 05:06:02 · update #3
when you are using the word "to" or "too" remember their meanings. "To" is not the same as "too"- which can be another word for "also". Just a little grammar tip! Good poem, though!
2007-07-17 04:37:38 · answer #1 · answered by doglover 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Its a really beautiful poem - all of the poems that you've posted on yahoo so far are. Good job!
Don't listen to the people without lives who care about the tiniest grammar errors. I'd like to here THEM write a poem as nice as yours.
2007-07-17 15:33:48 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is he still your boyfriend? it's very sad..
anyway.. I think got get around it quite nicely. The idea and intention through the poem is easy to follow. The number of syllables in each stanza changes a little though the poem, but never mind that:)
it's a lovely poem
2007-07-17 11:38:47 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nice poem.. but it turly is a bad idea to write poems about boyfriends. I wrote many poems about mine and he still dumped me and we were going out as long as you and yours have and I loved mine to death too. I'm not tryign pt preach or anything, just sayin'
Anyway, nice poem, it makes me think of my ex.. lol, none of my poems actually rhyme, lol!
Nice work =D â¥
2007-07-17 11:37:14 · answer #4 · answered by ♥ Cute T ♥ 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Too instead of to.
Doglover is right, Lmho!
Just that lil mistake but the poem is SOOO good that I thought you copied from somwhere. . .
I think you are just a . . . . POET!
2007-07-17 11:51:06 · answer #5 · answered by Candee_Puffs 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poems don't *need* to rhyme. In this instance it makes the work trite and banal.
And I second the grammar advice.
2007-07-17 11:51:41 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
i luv ur creativity and u so remind me of my own life so i definantly luv ur songi would kill someone that didnt like u cause u have such a great talent.
2007-07-17 15:12:30 · answer #7 · answered by pare 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get better at English. THEN make an art out of it.
2007-07-17 12:02:43 · answer #8 · answered by Ronnie 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
nice poem, but it should need no rhym,
2007-07-17 12:41:16 · answer #9 · answered by anna 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋