Would you please read my dedication to "Bobby"?

Question

{He was a great man that I cared for at a nearby nursing facility, he will be sorely missed}
(Love you Bobby)

I’m Still It........






Bobby was a kid at heart
since the tender age of three
Stricken by Scarlet fever
He remained that child indeed

Bobby was fifty-six years old
when he suffered a heart attack
while roaming through the hallways
as the police or playing tag

I knew Bobby just two years
in a walker racing askew
Screaming out a siren
warning all he’s coming through

I’d play tag with Bobby
if it didn’t hurt my job
He liked to sneak up on me
so I’d say “I see you Bob”

Just to see him smile and laugh
it truly made my days
He’ll never know I loved him
and all his silly ways

He’d meet me at the time clock
to be sure he tagged me last
Yesterday, he did and I’m still it
I’ll never get him back..........

Answer 1

Heartfelt poem. First two stanzas need work as the rhyme pattern you pick up in stanza three and follow until the end needs to be started from the beginning. Last line need not follow the pattern as you're indicating a break in continuity anyway, so an unrhymed word there works well.

Good poem, fix the first two stanzas.

Answer 2

A wonderful tribute, what a great person he sounded one of lifes larger characters that you are sometimes lucky to encounter. I bet Bobby would be pleased as punch. All love x

Answer 3

Though some of the rhymes are obviously imprecise, that is utterly negated by the fact that your poem is heartfelt, and clever. It's really very touching, and the poignancy that you'll always be "it" is very strong.

He sounds like he was fun, and I can pretty much guarantee that he greatly appreciated you.

If there will be services for Bobby, you should attend and read the poem.

Answer 4

It's a Nice Poem Bobby would like it if he read it

Answer 5

This is a beautiful dedication to Bobby. Somewhere now he is normal and he understands.

Answer 6

aw, that is so sweet
a remembering of your friend Bobby
and the fun you two had
and the games you played.
I can see you miss him.

Answer 7

you miss him........ a lot.........(by being it forever).....you miss him forever and could not anymore just drop in to take a peek at him...........

You miss him and his silly ways.....small small things that he does that holds a place in your heart. I bet you he feels the same about you......it is usually this small small gestures for me that i hold dear to my heart....gestures no one would understand but just between you and him.....that holds that special bond between two people who met and click in a way.

and oh yes my condolences to you.

Answer 8

that's sweet