tell me what you really think and how i could make it better cause its for summer school and have to give 2maro .............................
Eights say “good bye” to there elementary school after the graduation and soon look forward to saying “hi” to high school. But are they really ready to step into a whole new life?
On July 26th at 7pm was when that was “it” for the Bernard eights. They had to go up the stage and get the certificate they were waiting for since grade 1. But as soon as the moment was there all of a sudden a lot of grade eights did not want to graduate. Was it because they were going to not see a lot if there friends? And that they will have to make new friends? Or was it because of the change it will be, academicly? The graduation had been a normal grad,
Although a lot og the graduates did not like it at all.
A girl had said that here friends and her had agreeded that the graduation was not exactly what they had imagened it to be. Another student had said
2007-07-15 17:36:44 · 9 answers · asked by zeyy.12345 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
You need a lot of work on spelling, grammar, and word usage.
Shouldn't have procrastinated so much eh?
EDIT:
Why is it that no one who is giving advice can spell grammar correctly? It's an A people, not an E. If you're going to comment on someone else's grammar then have the intelligence to use it correctly and actually know how to spell the word. And furthermore, the word "spelt" is incorrect just to let the person a few posts below know.
2007-07-15 17:40:57 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, maybe you good not use the word eights so often. Eighth graders, eighth grade students, grade eight students, students in the eighth grade, and students (since the article is about eight graders gradutating, just students should be fine after it is made clear what grade you're discussing) would work. The there in you're first sentence should actually be their. There can be used for place reference or to help describe something among other things (examples: "the basket is over there" and "there used to be a blue house where the new post office is") while their is a possesive for a group of people (example: "Mr. and Mrs. Brown like to take their dog for a walk in the evening"). This also applies to the line "Was it because they were going to not see a lot if there friends?"
2007-07-15 19:16:03 · answer #2 · answered by knight1192a 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Another student had said....what??
You made a great point and I agree. I'm a new 7th grader and I don't want my friends to move to another school when i graduate 8th.
Some of the grammer didn't make since. grad in a formal writing should be Grad Student.But whatever.
And you made it seem like some world news was crashing down "On July 26th 7pm"
Sounds like someone died on July 26 7pm. Include the year at least.
And you mean to say middle school.
ELEMENTARY 1-5
MIDDLE 6-8
HIGH
2007-07-15 17:42:00 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
OK, there are a lot of spelling mistakes here and some issues with your phrasing. When writing articles, you can't really be that formal so 'eights' and 'grad' etc., are not acceptable things to say. Also, you dont really want to have too many questions... you have to make it fun, interesting try using phrasing that catches attention and is clear to the point- obviously the article is longer so i don't know how it progresses but those things i mentioned are the key things you need to focus on. And spellcheck everything before you submit it, dont make the 'there' their' mistake
2007-07-15 18:01:02 · answer #4 · answered by desireddisease15 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
writing is an art form---putting words on paper to get the readers to imagine what you are saying. People don't know what eights are--you mean eighth grade students--and all the other kid analogies have to be changed to exactly what you are talking about---no abbreviations or cute phrases for people who do not know what you are talking about--punctuation and spelling are in need of work---sentence structure is a little scattered---but I know you can proof read it and make it better---I like the story. Good luck
2007-07-15 17:50:32 · answer #5 · answered by fire_inur_eyes 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's boring. you lost me at 'eights say good bye'. maybe you should rewrite it in a different language like chinese. that way i can read it like a script for a kung fu film. this would be very exciting.
2007-07-15 19:02:55 · answer #6 · answered by gherd 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"hi" should be "hello" and "it" should be "time"
You do need to check spelling and grammar. Not spell check, cos some of the wrong words that are there are spelt correctly, they need amending to read right.
2007-07-15 17:46:08 · answer #7 · answered by smile_girl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Bad spelling and bad grammer... sorry hun - but it's no wonder you are in summer school. Ask your teacher for advise... and TAKE HEED!
2007-07-15 17:46:44 · answer #8 · answered by mawderuiz 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
sorry!!! i just don't understand your writing
2007-07-15 17:43:29 · answer #9 · answered by antapole 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋