How do you like this poem i wrote about one of my favorite poets?

Question

There was a young girl
in tears
during the reception at
Charles Bukowski's house
following his burial.

A man asked his widow,
'is she a relative?".

"No...she lived across the street,
Hank loved her
and she adored him...
she may be taking his death
the hardest of any of us".

Every man should have
such a young girl in his life.



(Check out my other 2 poems i have posted if you haven't already.)

Answer 1

This seems like his older stuff.

I've always liked his earlier work better.

Somewhere I in this forum I posted his "Crucifix in a Deathhand", that poem remains a favorite of mine. His early work from around 1964.

Answer 2

The only contemporary poet whom I would unhestitatingly call 'post modern' is Dana Gioia. Or rather, I would have no qualms about calling him 'postmodern'; I am far from convinced that he is a poet. Geoffrey Hill has written some excellent sonnets - including Requiem for the Plantagenet Kings. Would he still count as contemporary? Geoffrey is still alive, but he belongs to the same generation as Philip Larkin and Kingsley Amis (who both also wrote excellent metred poetry). The big problem with metred poetry (in English) is that it became so closely identified with The Movement that it was quite naturally - and healthily - largely abandoned by poets who came to prominence in the 1960's, 1970's and 1980's. Contemporary poets over 40 who work primarily in metre have almost always chose to do so out of intellectual sluggishness, or plain ignorance. They tend not to be much good. There are quite a few younger poets (under 30) who seem to have adopted metre as part of their repertoire. But since these people so far have appeared only in magazines, I'm not sure if you would call them professional. I posted a piece by one of this group of tyros on this site some years ago (see link); but until she has a book out, I wouldn't want to second-guess her any further than this.

Answer 3

Too prosy to be poetry, good emotions and feelings though. There is, however, a good start of a poem in there...it just gets lost inside the prose.

Remember, you can't turn prose into poetry by inserting line breaks...you need to produce something that is greater than the sum of its parts...or it remains prose.

If there is any "rule" of poetry, that's it in a nutshell.

Answer 4

Its good not my style but it tells a good story which I think is the point of poetry. Keep up the good work.
Keep Writting and posting!

Answer 5

I never knew writing a story like that was in the laws of poetry!! Then again, I dont know much about the laws of poetry... I liked it.