Poem about boredom? Read and comment please!?

Question

Hi everyone, I'm bored as can be!!!! So here's a small poem that I wrote about boredom. Thankz!

(noname)

Sitting at your desk,
with a pencil in your hand
and a sheet of paper in front
of you.
You've been sitting for hours
like this and haven't even
put a single word on the paper.
Nothing to do, nothing to see,
nothing, nothing, nothing.
That's what you think
but something is out there
waiting......

Hope you like it!! :D

Answer 1

the best poem is the one which can make people feel what you wrote..i can easily feel the your boredom.. it makes me bored too.. congratulation..

Answer 2

A poem about boredom which bored me by the second line - I guess its done its job huh! :)

If thats not the approach you wanted try adding things like.

The paper, white, smelt of an office
the led in the pencil, roughly sharpened with a knife was making marks on my clean page,
thoughts were blank, gone, not there as I struggled to find a word for anything..

ok bad example but put some imagery behind your words.

Keep it up

Answer 3

I'm hoping something is out there waiting, because I haven't put a single word on the sheet of paper in front of me. I could relate. Nice poem.

Answer 4

Instead of boredom, this poem sounds like depression or writer's block to me. Boredom is having nothing to do, but here you are trying to write something.

Answer 5

Instead of repeating the word 'nothing' try repeating a different word like pencil: pencil, pencil, pencil....or paper, paper, paper. I think your poem needs more "things" or "objects" in it so we can visualize the boredom more clearly.

Answer 6

i like it. i'm always bored haha

Answer 7

Good poem about boredom; and thanks i just yawned,,[just kidding]