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They say that ‘loving is hard, for our generation’. That it’s near impossible to find a kindred in this world of hostility, pain, strife and grief. Some aren't strong enough, they crawl back into their shells and live out their days with their backs to the world. I won’t call them cowards for that. Looking for love in the eyes of another takes bravery and uncommon audacity, I applaud the brave the audacious, I see them from my window walking dogs, strolling offspring, finishing each others sentences as if they are one cerebral fiber with volume at different ends. If you believe in god he must smile every time the phrase “soul mate” is used. He must watch them before they meet he must cringe when they cross the street when they are sick, and weak all the time hoping that nothing will stop them on there path to each other and then can we really imagine the joy god must feel when their eyes meet for the first time and he knows that they will never be apart again.

2007-07-13 09:39:23 · 3 answers · asked by Myself 4 in Arts & Humanities Poetry

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Are you shooting for poetry or prose? It's either one or the other. If you're shooting for poetry, you missed. If you were trying for prose, you got it...but if that's the case, what's the point?

Prose is the "opposite" of poetry. Prose is "my dog ate my lunch and now I have nothing to eat." Poetry is "I'd rather go hungry and have Sparky wag his tail thanking me for the lunch that almost was".

If you want to write prose, it's easy, just say what you mean and feel in a way that conveys what you mean and feel. No metaphor, to aliteration, no rhyme, no word play, just sentences piled one after the other. Pick up any novel...that's prose.

What you have posted is a diary entry. Not bad, some good insights, some good feelings and "poetic concepts", but no developed poetry. Nice prose, but nothing that will echo in the reader's mind two days from now.

Now, take what you've written and find a way to condense the concepts into 20 lines (rhymed or free verse) and you'll have a poem.

Good luck and keep writing.

2007-07-16 18:41:24 · answer #1 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 1 0

I think it's really good. I would like to hear more of your poems.

2007-07-13 16:46:50 · answer #2 · answered by Ashley M 1 · 1 1

i love it. you have a way with words.

2007-07-13 16:47:04 · answer #3 · answered by annihilatehate 2 · 1 1

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