What do you think of this?

Question

Sometimes I just don’t know, I don’t know where to go
how do i let my shine glow when this world is so damn cold
why do I feel so alone everyday as I head out the door,
I feel it so deep in my core how does one get their greatness to show
but deep down I really feel that im about to blow,
so I stay strong and pray to the lord
of course you never know what the future holds,
id go crazy if I couldn’t let my thoughts roll off the top my dome
as I write it down now I feel at home im so in control of my own flow,
**** the status quo I make the rules to my life going
to and fro tryin to make it and get my pot of gold at the end of the rainbow.

I know I wont be beat cause now im rising off my feet
before now I justed wanted to rest in peace
I could have gave a damn if I was six feet deep but now its gods will I must keep
so take a seat and feel this beat I don’t care what you think
im bout to take this leap and give you what yall need,
a message from the eternal king on a mission tryin to set you free
so please freeze and take a moment and think,
what do you really want, you know what I mean,
the desires of your heart is what im talkin about you feelin me,
is it money, girls, weed maybe a mix of all three or maybe
just to to not worry about the benjis or having a loving family,
lets go more deep and talk world peace
can this ever be achieved this I can only dream, but how can I believe
when our great nation wont even help another country in dire need you see
we only help if it feeds our need and turn a blind eye to the rest of our peeps
and we wonder why the rest of the world doesn’t like our stee like we
just want everyone to bow to there knees, is it really just about that green,
money isn’t even real to me but still I treat it like it grows on trees ****
I pick off these leaves and put em in my jeans as these
motha fukas walkin around like their **** don’t stink, you better double click
cause this is the link that will connect you to the **** that you seek,
I will not sleep until every last soul knows my man J.C. the only one who holds the keys,
this is the real game and we play for keeps.
This is the mission so kick back and listen to the wisdom
that is given cause what Im spittin is biblically written and this is no bullshittin
the seven deadly sins you need to know man, let me put em in your hand
consider this the last stand for this is the beginning of the end,
hip hop is dead, so let me tell you what I think lies ahead,
as i decipher the words that I’ve read, take advantage of the stories I spread ,
I know we just met but am so far ahead
just let me in cause we’re about to break bread

Answer 1

I like it....your very talented. It's a little contradicting though. You're speaking of christian ideas and your man J.C. and yet cussing up a storm, is that very christian? I like the part where you talk about people only wanting to help others if they get something in return. That is so sad, but true.

Answer 2

2 long

Answer 3

You have all the time to break bread after your dead and that's what lies ahead.

Answer 4

i stopped reading like 3 lines in. poetry is so boreing. and if that was rap lyrics... even worse.

Answer 5

I like it! Very talented! Keep it up! :)

Answer 6

it's too long, boring, and i don't care if you break bread

Answer 7

yeah didn't catch my attention either