Please Spell Check?

Question

Im 12 and i injoy writting sad poems. But i dont know if this is a poem Will you tell me and spell check it?

I See A Sad Person

No One likes her
They all are mean to her
No one trusts her
No one Cares about her
Every little girl
needs a little care
or every little girl
will never see the light

Answer 1

I'm 12 and I enjoy writing sad poems. But I don't know if this is a poem. Will you tell me and spell check it?

I see a sad person

Nobody likes her
They are all mean to her
Nobody trusts her
Nobody cares about her
Every little girl
Needs a little care
Or every little girl
Will never see the light.

That is really creepy. I could picture the girl from The Ring saying that...

Nosoop4u

Answer 2

Sasha's spell-checking is correct. Humaira's comment about switching from one person to more than one is also correct. You can fix that rather easily by changing

Every little girl
needs a little care
or every little girl

to

All little girls
need care
or all little girls...

Problem is, that sort of messes up the meter.

You've done so well on it so far, I'll bet you can solve that problem easily.

Might also be a good idea to somehow make it clear exactly what "the light" is that they will see. That's because "seeing the light" is often used insincerely to call someone dense: "Oh wow! He's finally seen the light!"

Merely a suggestion: "...will never trust or care."

Answer 3

I See A Sad Person (the unwanted)

No one likes her
They all are mean to her
No one trusts her
No one cares about her
Every little girl
Needs a little care
Or none of them
Will ever see the light

it is really good for your age, you should change the title to something more detailed, like the UN-wanted

Answer 4

See A Sad Person

No-one likes her
They all are mean to her
No-one trusts her
No-one cares about her
Every little girl
Needs a little care
Or every little girl
Will never see the light.

Answer 5

I See A Sad Person
PROOFREAD
No one likes her
They all are mean to her
No one trusts her
No one cares about her
Every little girl needs a little care
Or every little girl
Will never see the light
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This can be a poem, just you know, it doesn't rhyme, whcich it doesn't have to. It's written in verses. Are you the person who wrote that 'bullet in her head' poem?

Answer 6

They beauty of poetry is that people don't have to understand what certain things mean. It's left for them to decide what they think the author is talking about. I think this is very good for your age. I wrote poetry when I was young too, although now I just don't have time. I like it and it looks fine proofreading-wise. The only suggestion I have is about the last 2 lines, when you switch. I would change the last line to "or that little girl will never see the light".

Answer 7

i think the poem is pretty good but you talked about one girl when you said her than you sad every girl and it doesnt make sense it doesnt sound like a "poem" it just sounds like a list of words, thats what i think