What do you do when you’ve lost all hope,
Turned in your dreams for that long-lived rope,
Swear that the world has turned its back,
There’s no point in living that’s fact,
I’ll end it tonight,
Ill prove it to you,
We were supposed to last forever,
But that would never do,
You wanted someone else,
And I wanted you,
Ill end my life tonight,
And prove it to you,
I would never break your heart,
But now that you’ve left,
There’s nothing left for me,
Ill end my life tonight,
And then you will see,
We were meant to be,
There’s nothing stopping me now,
I’ve got the knife,
I’ll do it tonight,
Ill end my life,
All I needed was to hear your sweet voice,
Call out to me,
I will die tonight and then you will see,
I hope that one day you will see,
That it could have lasted forever,
We were meant to be.
2007-07-11 12:05:38 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
i think this is fabulous. just please dont kill yourself.
2007-07-11 14:30:04 · answer #1 · answered by Audrey♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There is NOTHING heroic about killing yourself for a girl that you cant get over. Its really just selfishness.
Hope your not planning on doing this. If you did you would only hurt yourself, it wouldnt prove ot her that you loved her at all. it would jsut prove to her that you were crazy and she was right to leave you.
Change the words around, otherwise its good.
2007-07-11 16:08:22 · answer #2 · answered by Kira 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a decent poem. The sentiment a little strange. If you're talking about yourself, you should come up with a more reasonable plan.
2007-07-11 12:21:13 · answer #3 · answered by Ronnie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You want to write poetry, then write poetry. You want to kill yourself to hurt someone else? My son's girlfriend did that and all she did was get brains all over her bathroom and two parents that will forever wonder what they could have done to prevent it, like put her in a mental hospital. My son's moved on. I guess she showed him, huh?
2007-07-12 20:07:46 · answer #4 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not to minimize the emotion here, which is obviously strong, but there are too many poems about people planning to kill themselves, already. It's always the same story.
2007-07-11 12:25:21 · answer #5 · answered by Sir N. Neti 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good
a bit morbid for my liking
i'm more of a broken heart and getting over kinda person but i liked it
2007-07-11 12:38:56 · answer #6 · answered by cluelessangel85 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋