I am slowly going crazy
In world full of drama
The drama is my demise
If I can only find a sanctuary I may yet come out of this alive
A sanctuary of peace, of hope, of caring, of love is my dream '
For a person to hold and to care.
To pull me up instead of pulling me down
Is what I need to live again.
To be alive to hope and help others is what I seek
I feel like a eagle caught in a snare yearning to fly but held down by sorrow and pain.
To fly, To love, To hope and dream without pain, without sorrow is what I dream of.
2007-07-11 06:17:02 · 9 answers · asked by The HotDog 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Yes, it is poetry in the "Free Form" style. It's even good.
2007-07-11 07:34:14 · answer #1 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
OOO very nice. I say just cut out a few words so it's more concentrated.
Slowly going crazy
In a world full of drama
Drama is my demise
If only I could find a sanctuary
I may yet come out of this alive
A sanctuary of peace
of hope
of caring
or love is my dream
For a person to hold and to care
to pull me up
instead of pulling me down
Is what I need to live again
To be alive
to hope
to help others
is what I seek
I feel like an eagle
caught in a snare
yearning to fly
but held down by sorrow and pain
To fly
to love
to hope
to dream
without pain
without sorrow
is what I dream of
2007-07-11 06:30:16 · answer #2 · answered by BluhBluh 7 · 3⤊ 1⤋
to respond to your important question - definite, rap lyrics may be seen poetry. Like a poem, the lyrics could have rhythm, tone and length etc. - so definite. although, continuously verify you answer the question. You have been asked to grant a poem, so do no longer confuse a sort difficulty with content cloth. To study out your rap poem could require skills and past awareness of listening to rap, that your instructor will possibly no longer very own. you may ought to grant the poem your self for it to make experience. in case you're, then prepare till ultimately it sounds ok in any different case they could no longer get it. because of the fact you're going for a resourceful physique of concepts, it desires to be extra suitable than merely a lame rhyme and that i agree, play risk-free and evade slang/swearing. there is conflict and contention in Macbeth, so rap ought to extra wholesome yet for my section, i could lead on your instructor in with some separate clarification to describe why you chosen a rap form, so that they comprehend this is a extreme poem. this is a solid theory and this is resourceful, so attempt it and attempt different types too - test and ask for comments - solid success!
2016-10-01 09:24:58 · answer #3 · answered by smart 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's iffy... it's good whatever it is... but a poem should have a distinct rhythm to it. Otherwise, its just a descriptive prose. Either one could be beautiful and deep.
2007-07-11 06:53:30 · answer #4 · answered by Thisisme 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
People may enjoy it, but it's not a poem. All you did was put each sentence on a seperate line.
Regarding another suggestion, putting each phrase on a seperate line also does not make it a poem.
2007-07-11 06:30:04 · answer #5 · answered by Ronnie 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
woha yea thats a nice poem if ur a guy show it to a girl and they fall in love trust me
2007-07-11 06:20:40 · answer #6 · answered by Alu S 1 · 2⤊ 1⤋
i hav 1 better use it roses are red, violets are blue pikles are sour now open them legs and feel the power
2007-07-11 06:26:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
Of course its poetry. If you feel it, then its poetry to at least to you.
2007-07-11 06:20:29 · answer #8 · answered by Badboy 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Nice !!!
2007-07-11 06:25:35 · answer #9 · answered by Greg 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋