Dear Dr. Neitzl:
I wish to thank you and also to express my appreciation and gratitude that you are willing to give me this chance. I would like you to know that I will do everything it takes to make this opportunity a sucess.
If you require, I can send my certificates to you via e-mail, or alternatively I can bring them with me when we meet.
2007-07-11 00:56:56 · 3 answers · asked by dan 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
The word "you" is used too much. Also, your first sentence is quite redundant--expressing appreciation and gratitude is thanking someone. In addition, you're pretty vague here--what chance? A job interview perhaps? Then say so. Be specific. I would do something like this:
I would like to express my appreciation and gratitude to you for giving me the opportunity to interview for this position I will do everything possible to insure success in this job.
Would you prefer that I can send a copy of my certificates to you via e-mail, or that I bring them with me when we meet?
2007-07-11 03:02:50 · answer #1 · answered by kk 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dan,
You say "If you require, I can send my certificates to you via e-mail, or alternatively I can bring them with me when we meet."
The only words I would change are "If you require".
Change the sentence to "Shall I send my certificates to you via email, or bring them with me when we meet?"
Don't forget the question mark at the end of my sentence revision.
2007-07-11 01:24:11 · answer #2 · answered by thisbrit 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's perfect. I wouldn't change a jot.
2007-07-11 01:01:46 · answer #3 · answered by jsardi56 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋