Is this sentence confusing?

Question

"Uniquely decorated guest rooms include 62 suites, some of which have views of city landmarks as well as luxurious features like fireplaces, jacuzzi tubs, and billiard tables."

grammatically, I mean

Hi folks,

Rather than just telling me that it's incorrect, could you tell me why you think it's incorrect? Because I still think it's correct, even if it's a little long-winded.

Answer 1

A grammar teacher might get upset, but I don't think it's actually wrong. Within the context of a hotel brochure, it makes perfect sense. A hotel has a total of at least 63 uniquely decorated rooms, 62 of which are actually suites (a "room" divided internally into, e.g. sitting room, bedroom, office, kitchenette, etc.). Some of these suites have views of city landmarks (others of these suites don't). Those suites which have views of city landmarks, additionally have luxurious features such as.....

Answer 2

Well it states Uniquely decorated guest rooms and then starts talking about suites and thats what makes that confusing. Its redundant.

Some of which have views of city landmarks isnt right - the view of a city should be a good point overall..

Basically the whole advert is off!!

Heres how i would put it :

62 Uniquely decorated guest rooms. Some of the rooms include incredible city views as well as fireplaces, jacuzzi's and billiard tables.

Answer 3

Yes and no.

It is potentially confusing, but grammatically acceptable. (I'd put a comma after "landmarks," but that's open to debate).

Why confusing? Poor sequence of subject relative to object, too much information for the reader to absorb. You don't want the reader to be focused on the sentence structure while missing your meaning.

Why say "rooms" if some are suites? Say "accommodations." It's hackneyed, but not unclear.

By "uniquely" do you really mean that each is different from the other? Or do you mean to say that the decor is somehow special. "Elegant," perhaps?

Which have "views of city landmarks?" Only the suites?

Do you really mean to say that some of the suites have billiard tables?

Break it down into your two main ideas:

1) The accommodations are elegant (or somehow special), and suites are available.

2) Amenities available include fireplaces, Jacuzzi baths (don't say tub, it sounds inelegant) and views of the city.

Perhaps Henry James could have put all of that into one sentence. And his readers would have re-read the sentence until they understood it. But those aren't your readers, and you ain't Henry James! (Neither am I - who would want to be nowadays?) Good luck!

Answer 4

Quotation marks "like this" or more acceptable now 'single inverted commas' are placed around quotes taken directly from someone elses work. It does not matter how many sentences involved as long as the direct lift from the author is surrounded by the inverted commas. However, as a rule of thumb, it is not considered good practice to use large chunks of someone else's work in this way in say an essay.

Answer 5

how about ..'with views of'
and ..'with luxurious features such as fireplaces, jacuzzis and billiard tables'... just a few less words, otherwise it's ok

Answer 6

"Uniquely decorated guest rooms include 62 suites..."
does each guest room include 62 suites?
That's how it reads.

Why not "We offer 62 suites that are uniquely decorated, some of which..?"

Answer 7

Yeah Why does it mention Billiard tables last ??

Answer 8

It doesn't confuse me a bit. Where is this place? Sounds cool :) Also, I see nothing incorrect.

Answer 9

i'm not an english major but i'm going to have to say that there seems to be something wrong with it. not sure what but... maybe you should put a semicolon or something somewhere in there.

Answer 10

I agree with pryva D