Why is Apple Pie so Good?
I don't care much for apples
and
I don't like pie crusts.
So why is apple pie so good?
2007-07-10 10:34:58 · 6 answers · asked by Johnnyboy 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
ha ha ha lol no but you are funny as #*@*
2007-07-10 11:59:35 · answer #1 · answered by Val 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm...try this
I don't care much for apples
And I don't like the crust of the pie
So why is apple pie so good
Please tell me, why, why, why!
otherwise it sounds like...
I don't like little puppies
and
I don't like little cats
So why do I like pets?
You got a good start with the first line, the third line contains the elements of cooperation, and your last line presents the antagonistic question. So, even if you choose not to go with my suggested revision, at least try tying them together in a way that is less mundane and distractive. You must have an ear for poetry, because you can hear it in the first line...so use it.
2007-07-14 02:46:39 · answer #2 · answered by Kevin S 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
What talent!
(Pie is good because of SUGAR)
2007-07-10 18:01:17 · answer #3 · answered by Joan H 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
lol, short and sweet that was cute!
Keep Writting!
2007-07-14 01:00:54 · answer #4 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really liked it, in a wierd sorta way.. it was cool
2007-07-10 19:43:29 · answer #5 · answered by SAXplaya! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It could be a little longer than that............
2007-07-10 18:08:00 · answer #6 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋