A New Wind to Follow
For the moment the wind has stopped blowing
So I have nothing to follow.
I feel lost. Question, where do I go from here? Has my journey ended? Perhaps it’s time for me to take control.
Should I take a new step in a unfamiliar direction?
I want to but my body feels numb.
Maybe in a way I’m trying to tell myself I’m not ready to take control
I guess I have to wait for another wind to follow.
2007-07-08 19:06:09 · 22 answers · asked by wat2do 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
yea but it isnt mysterious, i like mysterious poems, that leave you with multiple variations of what the author may have been going for, this is a good one tho, it describes a lot of our lives
2007-07-08 19:09:17 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. It has no substance. doesn't make sense even on a metaphoric level. it's just mindless talk about how your a loser, and thats it literally. you just keep asking the same thing. should you stop being a loser. then throw in a line at the begining and end about the wind to make it sound like a poem. thats weird.
This is the brutally honest truth. if you didn't want to hear it you shouldn't have asked.
2007-07-09 02:21:13 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
This poem is really nice.
It is really how many of us feel when we are faced with a situation that is not going right.
But I guess there can be a continuation for this poem. Instead of 'waiting' yu can also write about of doing something too.
Bet yu will come up with another sequal for this poem.
2007-07-09 03:09:51 · answer #3 · answered by 13 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poems usually rhymes at least once in every stanza. Also, to really appreciate a poem, its meaning should be deep beyond the normal words that people use.
There's a saying that poets have the license to use words that are not easy to comprehend, those that are not even found in the dictionaries.
Good luck to your writing!
2007-07-09 02:20:44 · answer #4 · answered by Lex 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It doesn't rhyme but you can tell it's poetry coz it don't scan. And you shouldn't just "follow the wind". It could lead you off a cliff. Try going to a career guidance councellor.
2007-07-09 02:56:28 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think it's good, but maybe more on the human characteristics of the shifting wind.
2007-07-09 02:11:53 · answer #6 · answered by Ashamed2beHuman 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well,,,,
Try to do it with a rhyme...
U sound like having the talent for it, but u could surely do better than that
I liked the way it goes..It gets u into the picture into your head...So u were able to get us there.....
But it lacks the rhyme...
Pls. try it again, and I am sure u would do it right...
Best of luck...
2007-07-10 11:24:49 · answer #7 · answered by FOREVER AUTUMN 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Usually the poems on this site suck. But I loved that. It was so honest, real, and personal. And I am not just saying that!
2007-07-09 02:08:59 · answer #8 · answered by Emily C 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, but I would change the line "Question, where do I go from here," to:
I ask myself, "Where do I go from here?"
It flows better with the feel of the poem.
Keep writing!
2007-07-09 02:10:54 · answer #9 · answered by Serving Jesus 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love the meaning of this! I really like it, great job.
2007-07-09 02:09:14 · answer #10 · answered by Christina 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋