ok..make corrections to this sentence... i'm trying to write an essay.. and i dont know how to use propper grammar.
Every little girl wants to be a princess, but does this goal fade with the years?
2007-07-04 06:06:19 · 5 answers · asked by leoncita 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Your sentence looks fine to me, grammatically speaking. But is being a princess a goal or more like a fantasy?
2007-07-04 06:10:19 · answer #1 · answered by Moxie Crimefighter 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the sentence structure is fine. here are my issues with it: 1. does every girl want to be a princess? what is this assertion based on? 2. being a princess is not a goal, but perhaps a fantasy or dream. 3. do goals fade? or are they replaced?
2007-07-04 13:17:06 · answer #2 · answered by chicananerd 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Every little girl wants to be a princess; does this goal fade with the years?
2007-07-04 13:22:32 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Basically it's OK, but replace "goal" with "dream", cos goals don't fade; dreams do. Hope this helps.
2007-07-04 16:08:16 · answer #4 · answered by SKCave 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That sentence is grammatically correct as it stands. No change is needed.
2007-07-04 14:01:14 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋