poem....if you have to time read for your pleasure. thankyou.?

Question

The Image of.....(you fill in the blank...)


Those ocean colored eyes with golden rings.
That chesnut hair with flips like wings.

Long and slender nose, prefered to some liking.
Ears that are small, much unlike a viking.

Cheeks once puffy, but now sucken in.
A cute, but, unnoticible little chin.

A hairline that receeds, but not to far.
Lips that are flawless, not to large.

Answer 1

That was nice. Your fill in the image title sort of reminds me of a scene by Bill Murray in Groundhog day when he is asking his love interest what her perfect guy was like and to each answer he said: Me, Me, Sounds a lot like me. I'm really close here. Well, I personally am not really close here, but it was a nice descriptive read.

Answer 2

I think you described the person very well, but your missing the ending. All you seem to be doing is describing yourself or a friend or a crush or something. Now that's not much of a poem, eh? Well... If it's done right it could be, but I think you'd have to have some pretty good experience to do that...

Anyways, Honestly, and not to be mean but... I didn't like it... You just have nothing there, ya know? And I'm not the world's biggest fan of rhyming poetry, either, so that might be a reason why I don't like it, honestly. Although I think you do have something going, but it shouldn't stop just yet.

Luck with your writing, though...

Answer 3

Is short and really nice, I like it a lot quite honest. Keep writing.

Answer 4

So loving and observent of a face that you love. I can actually picture it, and I really like this piece because it is concise.

Answer 5

The image of a natural ^_^

Answer 6

keep writting poems... I enjoyed. I write them my self sometimes. poetry is the words of ones heart. the music of ones soul

Answer 7

a beautiful person,[in the past]

Answer 8

Thank you! That was worth my time.

Answer 9

ex-husband