why r we sent 2 earth?
wat is our actual worth?
who r we n wat we'll be
wat more is left 4 us to see
fire,air all play some role
wat fate is restored in our soul?
wat is the mysterious truth behind our birth
is our life just composed of sorrows n mirth
or we have something special in store
well, we neither know the future nor the yore.....
wat else??
2007-07-03 01:58:18 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
can u rate it on the scale of 1-10
2007-07-10 01:12:55 · update #1
It's a good effort held back by some issues with English.
2007-07-03 03:09:13 · answer #1 · answered by Ronnie 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Honey could you actually use english and try spelling out. What is yore what does that mean? Good effort I give it a 7/10. Keep at it. Keep Writting you can only improve!
2007-07-11 03:34:02 · answer #2 · answered by Sh00ting_St@r! 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poetry uses words not part of words, I know I may use the wrong word but it is a word. Life is hard enough without adding communication to the problem. I am sorry for I usually don't get into a debit over the merits.
2007-07-09 17:05:22 · answer #3 · answered by Coop 366 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
this is a deep and very penetrating question formed poem. not typical but very unique in the aspect of the author. its like the author is not only expressing and yearing for the meaning of life but most importantly for their purpose here in this cruel and punishable world just dig deeper for your talent its there screaming to get out. BELIEVE!!!!
2007-07-08 00:58:06 · answer #4 · answered by katchiogo2007 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
umm...definitely lacking proper english, but since that isn't entirely what matters, overall the poem is pretty good. I would give it a 6. Tell your friend to keep writing.
2007-07-11 08:55:31 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you could try using a complete sentence with proper english...
2007-07-09 21:25:01 · answer #6 · answered by your face 1 · 2⤊ 0⤋
not bad ...forget the abbreviations..works better
2007-07-11 00:55:50 · answer #7 · answered by honeybee 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok, but dont use those retarted abbreviations
2007-07-08 23:53:53 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice
2007-07-07 17:40:14 · answer #9 · answered by pink cute fairy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋