Poverty's poet
My stare is without solace
passion and joy have wane
My eye's now fail to weep
deaf ear's hear my cries
insatiable famishment waits for me
my anger is without desire
upon what pillowy cloud shall I rest?
for the harbinger is near to me
bitter is the morsel of my imminent fate
will you embolden me to fight on?
where are the spoils of your riches?
alone with selfish excess shall you pass
my soul now shivers and trembles
for poverty has claimed it shield.
2007-06-30 17:25:40 · 4 answers · asked by kiphyn b 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Love it! Great job, "beginner" You don't sound like one to me.
2007-06-30 17:30:36 · answer #1 · answered by Tigady 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Loved it! Definetly better than beginner, although I think you could branch out and add more lines to the verses in future verses. (Not sure what style you like, the short or long verses, but you would be great with the longer ones!)
Good Luck!
2007-06-30 17:38:07 · answer #2 · answered by Jessica H 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. I think it's great. It sounds very classical. You left of the 'd' at the end of the word waned.
2007-06-30 17:29:06 · answer #3 · answered by the Boss 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very good for a beginner.I love it i myself write poems too.
2007-06-30 17:29:40 · answer #4 · answered by blueeyedbaby41 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋