Do you think that my thesis statement needs revision?

Question

Global warming is caused by pollution created by humans, it is necassary then as a society that we make an effort to preserve the delicate balance of our ecology.

Answer 1

This is a good thesis statement if you're in elementary school.

Answer 2

Do you really want to say that global warming is only caused by human pollution?? Other way you should change the first sentence. I would propose to use a different approximation for the tittle because Global Warming is a huge topic and you are more interested in the social response. It would be better than you don´t write so firmly that pollution created by humans is the ONLY source of global warming, there are many natural cycles involved too.

Answer 3

Is this what you are trying to prove? Are you trying to prove in your paper that global warming is caused by pollution created by humans? Because if it is, then it is fine, just some grammatical errors. "period" after Humans or you can use a semicolon after "humans". Make it look like this: "Global warming is caused by pollution created by humans; it is necessary that as a society we make an effort to preserve the delicate balance of out ecology." or put a period after humans

Answer 4

You could tighten it up a bit.

Since human-created pollution causes global warming, humankind must try to preserve the delicate balance of the ecosphere.

Or, if your thesis deals with the issue of remediation, your thesis statement could be as follows.

Since human-created pollution causes global warming, humankind must try to remediate and preserve the delicate balance of the ecosphere.

Answer 5

I did a paper on Global Warming back in may along with a lot of other research. here is my first paragraph I hope it will help you or at least give you good idea.

The rise of carbon dioxide is more poisonous to our atmosphere and our oceans than we may realize. The carbon dioxide from human activities causes a greenhouse gas which induces global warming, so if this greenhouse gas continues to rise, the oceans will become so acidic it could drastically threaten marine life by the year 2100. In the past two hundred years the Earth has absorbed about one third of the carbon dioxide caused by human activity. However, the rate now of the earth’s absorption of the carbon dioxide is at about one half. Faster carbon dioxide emissions overwhelm the capacity of land and ocean to absorb carbon. (Sanders) The rate of the emissions of carbon dioxide needs to be reduced in order to slow down global warming. However, there a few solutions to this problem for example, injecting the carbon dioxide into the ocean floor to absorb the carbon.

if you want to read my paper along with the sources then:
http://blog.360.yahoo.com/blog-dMWGRys6aa_XpBRW8maZPnay52Qj_6U-?cq=1&p=12

Answer 6

Yes. How about this one: "Global warming is Nature's attempt to restore the Earth's normal temperature. Typically, the temperature of the Earth has been several degrees warmer than what it is today, and glaciers, even at the polar regions, are not seen in the Earth's geologic history. It appears that humankind is a willing tool that the Earth is using to combat this recent bout of Global Cooling."

Answer 7

just a little punctuation revision. Your comma after humans should be either a period (.) or a semi-colon (;). Iwould go with the semi-colon myself.

Answer 8

Yeah it does need revision, GW is not caused by pollution created by humans, its a natural cycle.

Answer 9

after humans, it should be period.