Is this a good poem? Trustful comments, please?

Question

All these feelings I have for you
Are feelings that I can’t explain.
The way you hold my hand,
The way you kiss me,
The way you make me laugh,
The way you make me smile,
Are the ways that you make me feel like me.
I feel like myself when I’m around you.
No one else can make me feel like this.
I can’t let you go
Because you’re the best thing that ever happen to me.
No one else holds my hand like you do,
No one else kisses me like you do,
No one else makes me laugh like you do,
No one else makes me smile like you do
And gives me the amazing felling that you give me
When I’m around you.
All you need to do is look at me
And the feeling I get is outstanding.
If we break up when I’m not ready to,
Things will never be the same.
My life will go down here from there.
I trust you with my heart
And if you break it,
The side that no one else saw of me,
Will be flushed down the toilet,
And you will miss the way I used to be.

Answer 1

aww, it's good :) i like it!

Answer 2

I like how the beginning and middle kind of match up and you did not feel the need to make everything rhyme which some people seem to think is the criteria of a good poem.
Perhaps ypu could shorten or use different language starting at "All you need to do is look at me" For some reason, it seems to change the mood for me and the last line "and you will miss the way I used to be" kind of seems out of place because the rest of it is talking about you and being almost sweet but that last line kind of almost sounds threatening to me.
I like how it is simple and personal, from the heart...keep it along that line.
It is good though, probably better than I could write.

Answer 3

Your words are powerful, but I agree with sleepydad; this is very journal-like! It is more like prose, not poetry. I would recommend putting more imagery and metaphor into this poem. Make it more visual. I would also consider making this a two part poem: The good part of the relationship and the bad!

Answer 4

Well, I hate sappy love poems first of all. It's so junior high. I do think it might make a good sappy pop song, though. People in the young age group will probably like it but us cynical "dark" types won't.

Answer 5

This is journaling. This isn't poetry. No offense! Its a nice expression with good sentiment. Its sad and stuff. Put a date at the top of it and read it later. Its a good journal entry.

Answer 6

i like it..its kinda Like...turning your existence around thinking approximately it. discovering to alter issues for the and appreciating what good they could convey you and how they could earnings you. Its very good and that i cant wait to establish greater of your paintings. Very valuable and inspiring. It cuases you to think of approximately your existence fairly, and to establish in case you are able to desire to alter something.

Answer 7

I wouldn't say that it is a bad poem...but it just doesn't flow very well. And it sounds a bit generic.

Answer 8

Beautiful....flowing words and the feelings are so intense. Great work, keep it up.

Answer 9

Aaw...its really cute. Yea its a good poem. I wish I could write like that. Good job. =)

Answer 10

I like it but the part I don't like is u use "do" and u use "no one else" too many times...

Answer 11

It depends on what you think is good..

Good like omg send it to hollywood to get discovered good...NO

But just good, good.. oh yeah definately