im bored so i wanna see if people like my poem stuff
the anger that controls the inner souls
and the logic that flawed is taken in wholes
misconceptions and lies that comprimise
decption that ties to all our lives
what can we belive from anyone today
and to obey the law they lay then pay
to bring us in a direction thought to be perfection
but is only a selection of new direction
one that is flawed through logic and sense
yet things are heading in great suspense
wondering if the end is near or the ozone we sear
is lies or fact brought by people they fear
every man has a demon waiting to rise
waiting for their own power not to comprimise
idk im bored haha
2007-06-27 22:16:38 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
This is the first post of yours I went to since the last time I commented. Grammar, style, etc... a lot better..(but still needs editing)
I consider myself to be a great writer, but too prosaic. I couldn't write like you do...
I'm talk'n like Bob Dylan potential (maybe). Do you know what he did/has said? He said it just "came out".....and PHSssst... no more... If it's there now - you need to make your move now!
Hey, I've got some ideas. I sent you 3 emails to consider.
2007-06-28 18:23:19 · answer #1 · answered by M O R P H E U S 7 · 7⤊ 0⤋
Neither. It is just a chunk of a gloomy picture being drawn in the mind under certain unfavorable conditions. We all experience that state of mind, however, not all of us express it in poetry - that gives you an extra point over the average people.
Cheer up, and write more ... Worry not about how your writings look as long as you vent the pressure.
2007-06-28 05:26:30 · answer #2 · answered by arabianbard 4 · 0⤊ 2⤋
Wow...You sound depressed as well as bored. Cheer up and give some more thought to positive evolution.
2007-06-28 06:12:22 · answer #3 · answered by Don W 6 · 0⤊ 2⤋
If we were as a flower, a tree,
A rock or animal and just BE
A different world it is we'd see.
To be STILL, and in that stillness find-
All that we are - Eternally.
I like mine better :)
2007-06-28 05:32:46 · answer #4 · answered by bumblecrumb 2 · 0⤊ 2⤋
I can comprehend detached sentences, but not this in whole. It's a little complicated.
2007-06-28 05:31:06 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
needs work. It makes sense, just needs something..Salt??
2007-06-28 05:20:27 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
don't beat yourself up work on it
2007-06-28 05:33:54 · answer #7 · answered by Friend 6 · 0⤊ 3⤋