Please comment my poem? And then...?

Question

Please rate, and then finish it with your own verse, line, whatever! Have fun! =P


All I ask for is someone to love
All I ask for is only that one
Only that one who is willing for me
To be Whomever and whatever I ask them to be
I won’t ask for much, just compassion and love
Be willing, forgiving, I think that's enough

One who'll stand by me and help share the pain
I love you my darling, you're perfect
Now change...

NOW it's complete!

Answer 1

The thing is you say "To be whomever and whatever I ask them to be" and then you say "I won't ask for much..."
Sounds a little confused, but maybe that's what you are trying to convey?

Answer 2

All I ask for is someone to love
All I ask for is only that one
Only that one who is willing for me
To be Whomever and whatever I ask them to be
I won’t ask for much, just compassion and love
Be willing, forgiving, I think that's enough


In anticipation of our next meeting,
I get a shiver down my spine.
To be in the control of your able hands
Is an addictive passion of mine

8/10


ref. Karen Hudson

Answer 3

"All I ask for is someone to love
All I ask for is only that one
Only that one who is willing for me
To be Whomever and whatever I ask them to be
I won’t ask for much, just compassion and love
Be willing, forgiving, I think that's enough..."

One who'll stand by me and help share the pain
I love you my darling, you're perfect
Now change...

Answer 4

I speak English as a hobby, I am a Romanian girl. So, I can not judge your poem, but I would like you to read it in my way:

All I ask for is someone to love
That's a problem not easy to solve
Only that one who 's willing for me
To be all that I ask him to be
I won’t ask for much, just a passionate touch
Be willing, forgiving, and feel what I'm feeling.

Answer 5

i love ur poem its good i mean great last line....????.......

All I ask for is someone to love
All I ask for is only that one
Only that one who is willing for me
To be Whomever and whatever I ask them to be
I won’t ask for much, just compassion and love
Be willing, forgiving, I think that's enough
For though

Answer 6

Actually, the last two lines seem enough to redeem line 4, in my opinion. I would cut line 2. The rhyme and the rough rhythm combine for a nice sound. I enjoyed it.

(Very rough) Personal Addendum:

Surely that is not too much to ask for,
Just a person who will care and adore.
All that I ask for is someone to hold,
A warm companion to help fight the cold.

Answer 7

everyone needs someone to love,
everyone needs a place to be safe
and and a shoulder to cry on.
everyone deserves to be cared for
everyone deserves to be respected
and a someone to snuggle.
and that will never be to much to ask for if you return it with the same because everyone needs to be loved.

I love your poem and every single word is true but you shouldn't question if you should be loved everyone should be loved by at least one person.
Your poems always inspire me to write. Thank you!

Answer 8

3 1/2 out of 10

All I ask is for no more sorrow
A heart that won't leave me today or tomorrow
A love that n'ere even wishes for more
Than what I am willing to give--amore
Oh! If this is too much to ask of you
Please, don't let me know that your love isn't true.

Thanks, this was fun!

Answer 9

from 1 to 10 I give you 8

The first three lines are great, 4th line must go...., 5th and 6th are OK....

All I ask for is someone to love
all I ask fo is only that one
only that one who is willing for me
then I'll be willing for you
i won't ask for much
be willing, forgiving
always for me, always for you
I think that's enough

Thanks for sharing

Answer 10

I just want to be that one
Your eyes will shine with just one glance
If only i am the person with
you want to share your soul and be

you write great!!!
I am just a copycat I suppose!!!
jajajajaja
Continue on your work!!