can anyone correct this please??

Question

The inside and the outside of the store were painted in purple, which I think was pretty nice. I felt very welcome when I entered the store. The employees were courteous and helpful. There were two sections of the store, the first section which is the front of the store that isn’t private and is for anyone. The back side of the store carried all of the adult videos and toys.

I pictured a sex shop as being somewhat seedy. What we walked into was a clean, well lit shopping mart with well stocked shelves and every sex toy imaginable. When we went into the store, I was surprised by who was there. Everyone was older than Damian and I, but they were just normal people just there looking to see things that they want to buy. The front area of the store contains different variety of condoms with many colors and offers different kinds of brand name such as lifestyles and Trojan. There were costumes, lube, condoms, lingerie, and novelty items like sex board games. There shirts that said difference kinds of sexual things such as “take it off” or “do me.” Underwear and bras are sell at a fair price.

thanks everyone.

Answer 1

"Underwear and bras are sold at a fair price."
is there more? It seems to drop off at the end, you need to wrap it up. I would also stay away from the word "seedy" as a decription..it's kind of a pun (unless of course the pun is intended) since you are talking about a sex shop..and sperm is refered to as "seed"

Answer 2

The inside and the outside of the store were painted in purple, which I think was pretty nice. I felt very welcome when I entered the store because The employees
were courteous and helpful. There were two sections of the store: the first section -- which is the front of the store-- isn’t private and is for anyone. However, The back side of the store carried all of the adult videos and toys.

I pictured a sex shop as being somewhat seedy. Instead, we walked into a clean, well lit shopping mart with well stocked shelves and every sex toy imaginable. The front of the store contained a variety of brand name condoms such as lifestyles and Trojan in many different colors. . There were also costumes, lube, lingerie, and novelty items like sex board games. There were shirts that bore different kinds of sexual statements such as “take it off” or “do me.” Underwear and bras had a price tag set at fair price.

When we went into the store, I was surprised by who was there. Everyone was older than Damian and I, but they were just normal people there looking
to see things that they want to buy.

Answer 3

The inside and outside of the store were painted purple, which I thought was nice. I felt very welcome when I entered the store. To me, the employees were courteous and helpful.
There were two sections of the building--the front side of the store is not private and anyone can enter it. The back of the store carried all the adult videos and toys.
I had pictured a sex shop as being seedy or dirty, but what we walked into was a clean, well-lit shopping mart with well-stocked shelves holding every sex toy imaginable. When Damian and I entered the store, we were amazed to see that everyone there was older than we and were normal people just there to see what they wanted to buy.
The front of the store contained different kinds of condoms with many colors, and offered different brand names such as Lifestyles and Trojan. There were costumes, lubricants, lingerie, and novelty items like board games. There were shirts that had different kinds of sexual sayings, such as "Take it off," or "Do me." All the underwear and bras sold for a fair price.



(Note: you needed to watch for your shift in verb tense--sometimes it was in the present tense, and other times it was past tense. I put it in past tense because it seems to me like this occurred in your past--even if it were only an hour ago)

Answer 4

The inside and outside of the store was painted purple.A nice colour.I felt welcome when I entered.Employees were courteous and helpful.There were two sections in the store. The first, at the front, was the public part,anyone could enter.The rear section was restricted to age , and contained adult videos and sex toys.Picturing sex shops as somewhat seedy, I was surprised to walk into a well lit, clean and tidy store. Well stocked , and on every shelf, every sex toy imaginable.On entering I was surprised at the occupants. Everyone was older than Damian and I, just ordinary people looking at things to buy.The front of the store sells a variety of condoms; many colours, and a host of brand names.A display of costumes, Gel,condoms, lingerie, and novelties such as Sex board games.Shirts that had sexual references like- " Take It Off", or "Do Me". Ladie's lingerie at a reasonable price.