What do you think of this song I wrote a second ago?

Question

What do you think of this song I wrote a second ago?
***IT'S NOT COMPLETE*** but, what do you think so far?

"Blinded by your own reason,
Changing your mind with every season,
So thick headed
You won't listen to what I say,
For my mind there is no easing
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You go about life like nothing matters
and nobody cares,
Well, your ignorance is too much for me to bear,
With your headstrong way,
And your clouded view
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You tell me Fu*k off!,
And I reply: Fu*k you!,
Thats right! You heard me!
I finally got through.
Sadly, I'm afraid,
It's because I acted like you!"

This would be a rock

Yeah... I know it's kinda... well alot angrier than I like to be. My friend told me to F-Off. When I was just trying to help her... so I wrote this to get the bad feelings out. Im not mad anymore, I released the bad karma! lol

Answer 1

Our words express how we feel. A poet express feeling through poetry.

I liked it. You got talents. I would like to say specially for you
"Never let talents die inside of you. Give them a chance to meet the test of life."

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Answer 2

Sorry don't like it - it's like bad Courtney Love or twisted Alanis Morissette. You're one angry gal. Try some subtlety and nuance.