i'm only gonna put the first verse and first chorus on it. the only instrument played is acoustic guitar. i'm only 12 so i'm sorry if the words sound kinda kiddish.
(line 1)
she called me up and said i don't know what to do
i know its been awhile now since i talked to you
i know its been awhile now since we last met
and you're not very proud of me i bet
(chorus 1)
i tried hard to impress her i tried too hard
i hope she gets to marry a movie star
i still remember the night she walked out the door
and told me i can't love you anymore
2007-06-23 21:57:09 · 9 answers · asked by johnrzeznik222 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
o and by the way the ew sound in movie star is supposed to be held for 3 beats before going to vie. and these are my lyrics.
2007-06-23 22:18:50 · update #1
o by the way the song is called i can't love you anymore
2007-06-23 22:51:01 · update #2
I'm twelve too - I like them but if you're like going for fame, don't become a Disney Channel "superstar", we have enough of those already LOL.
2007-06-23 22:04:15 · answer #1 · answered by waddlin' along 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have a real talent. Technically speaking, the meter and rhyme are almost perfect. I would like to see you change one line which strike me as awkward: "I hope she gets to marry a movie star." You are trying to say you wish only the best for "her." Find a more poetic way of doing it.
2007-06-24 05:03:28 · answer #2 · answered by Steve C 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if they r your lyrics way to go! i particularly love the last 2 verses. do u have more lyrics? im a poet so i love these things :)
2007-06-24 05:01:25 · answer #3 · answered by *blink* 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow u are very talented
2007-06-24 05:15:49 · answer #4 · answered by lulu 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice
well-written
2007-06-24 05:02:19 · answer #5 · answered by Mag 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great! i love it. its perfect
2007-06-24 05:09:58 · answer #6 · answered by scholar 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good
2007-06-24 05:02:39 · answer #7 · answered by It's Whatever 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great lyrics...i like it...
2007-06-24 05:02:30 · answer #8 · answered by wojjy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
they're mad skillz
2007-06-24 04:59:19 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋