that hopeful smile as I left the school,
the twinkle in these green eyes of mine,
they never last forever.
a giggle at the stupidest joke,
my lack of words when you see me,
they should have told you how i feel.
now school is over like hopes that you and I could be together,
you are off with some girl that doesn't truly care,
and i am starting to fall for another.
2007-06-23 15:10:50 · 19 answers · asked by iANNA! 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
sincere but ultimately quite boring, sorry
2007-06-23 15:14:47 · answer #1 · answered by jljimenezs30 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
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2016-11-07 07:50:15 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like are love sick and trying to convince the reader that you don't care about your ex, and trying to convince yourself that you are falling in love with someone new.
Give yourself sometime to get over the first before you dive in again.
Good Luck to you, but read your own poem, and you'll see what you're own words were saying.
2007-07-01 10:14:34 · answer #3 · answered by shane f 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. It brings me back to how I used to feel when I was in HS and had a secret crush on someone, and I like that it ends w/ both of you moving on rather than you sitting in your room sobbing over some guy who didn't notice or deserve you. Good job.
2007-06-23 15:15:14 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think that you need more reading about that project and you must take careful from the internal rhyme with is in poem the last rhyme of the word. but like a beginner is very good
2007-06-23 15:18:58 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
wow! i admire how you had the guts to post this. i am so bad at poetry and i always feel pressured to rhyme. i could really identify with the feelings you were trying to convey.
2007-06-23 15:14:36 · answer #6 · answered by decepticons_go 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it cause it reminds me of my school love that never was or never can be as well i waited for him but he never grow up and well i went my way he his way.
2007-07-01 14:05:50 · answer #7 · answered by lisakaiza 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats really good i can feel the emotion and WOW i think that its great i can picture it so ccleary this poem was amazing
2007-06-23 15:14:48 · answer #8 · answered by soccerlvr4life 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its a great poem, it just needs a title. there are contests that you can sign up for, you would have a good chance in winning!
2007-06-23 15:13:47 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think It's really good.
2007-07-01 10:34:38 · answer #10 · answered by meowger 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice free verse
2007-06-23 15:16:37 · answer #11 · answered by MrTwister 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋