Suicide
Lying in the grass on a sunny day,
Wishing I would die and blow away.
Couldn't get much lower, in way too deep,
Way too many promise, I just can't keep.
Thinking of the ways one could end their life,
Wishing I could take it back and end the strife.
Swallowing a shotgun, doesn't seem my style,
Think that I'll just lie here and ponder it a while.
Poison is the one way, people give a try,
I don't even think so, I don't know why.
The taste of Cyanide wouldn't be so great,
Sprinkled on lasagna, on my dinner plate.
Suicide by cop, that one's tried and true,
Could he live with that one, the man in blue?
No, I couldn't put that on just anyone,
He is just a man, it's not fair to use his gun.
In the end I know that I'm the only one,
I came to realize while lying in the sun.
I know I'll go another day, living with the pain,
Sure would better suit me, if it just would rain.
2007-06-23 14:14:19 · 15 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Excellent once again! You should keep a journal of all these wonderful poems. Your Journal name: Poetry, by ''The Dark Prince''.
2007-06-23 17:20:46 · answer #1 · answered by Cricket 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Suicide is not a solution. It's a choice. A choice that you can make or not make. You have the final say, Steve. No one can make the decision for you. You have to choose yourself. But I believe that what you want is not death, but for the pain to go away, so that you can move on and live a happy and healthy present and future. Writing is also another option. Poetry is a great way to let out your feelings, yes... but "beside" poetry, what other things in life do you like to do? I suggest outdoor sports... running, taking a walk, or go to the gym... instead of just sitting by the computer writing poetry. It's great to write poetry... but maybe go outside and do something different... or write your poetry outside... When you are outside, surrounded by nature, that in itself has a healing power... besides talking and working out your problems with a professional. There is no shame in doing that, but rather, you are to be commended for getting the help you need. Why suffer, when you can be free... free to live a free life? But, again, it is YOUR choice... to choose life and move on... I can't make that decision for you, others can't make that decision for you. If you need help and can't work things out on your own, then GET HELP. I hope you choose LIFE, steve, because the "other alternative"... it's just an alternative, NOT a solution. If you choose life and get help, when you look back at this point in time that you are at now, you will understand and realize the meaning of what I'm saying. But it's, again, it's YOUR choice... a decision only you can make. May God's peace be showered upon you and your life. Choose life... it's the better decision.
2007-06-24 01:05:36 · answer #2 · answered by blueskies 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Glad to see you're still working with your depression instead of burying it. Poetry is good therapy. One technical suggestion though, your second line in each verse seems to be one syllable short. Was this intentional? Hope that's not the missing bullet in the gun. You also left the s off promises in the last line of verse 1, but that could be just a typo. Rains come, and so does sun and promises form rainbows in the diffused light. Funny thing, you can't force a rainbow, it's like life , it happens.
2007-06-23 21:45:18 · answer #3 · answered by Fr. Al 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
very interesting to read! great!
but suicide is death
we don't want a poet or any person to commit it
by the way, I laughed at the cyanide tasting not great
I liked the "sprinkled on lasagna", oh, very tasty food but don't put cyanide on it, if you are sad or angry, break your plate and not yourself, hope you are ok
2007-06-24 11:53:11 · answer #4 · answered by pearls & lace 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Of course just to follow the crowd i must as you to seek professional help. HEY! that rimmed!hahahehe, Now correct me if I'm wrong but I feel as if you really wouldn't do yourself harm, its people like you and me who have way to much time to ponder things, like life and death and how easy that all be. But as myself i really felt connected to your poem for I've though thoughts like those heck have the time i still do, but its more random. but over all I loved your poem, show feeling and depth, and I'm sorry your alone....
2007-06-23 21:28:16 · answer #5 · answered by tanjha 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is cool you are good. hopefully it is Just a poem but kinda creepy... Also if that zombie looking guy is right you should find something that lightens you up or do what he told you. i hope your OK. (and don't take it offensively guy with the drawling i think thats a good, unique idea..nice.)
2007-06-23 21:27:54 · answer #6 · answered by Kai 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a really heavy poem and it touches my soul,,, do you always write this good?I hope your not really thinking of doing things like on the poem.. Your talented and should keep on writing ,,,,
2007-06-24 01:27:15 · answer #7 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You need like... a hobby instead of pondering ways to take yourself. Play musical instruments. They're fun.
2007-06-23 21:22:21 · answer #8 · answered by iplaytheoboe 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like the poem, but you really do sound depressed. See a psychiatrist and get some Prozac, or listen to NIN--that helps me.
2007-06-23 21:19:23 · answer #9 · answered by KIZIAH 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i like the poem.. it seems like very emotional and realistic, its like the emotion of a very depressed person.. and it really got my attention.. so if i'll grade you with 100 as perfect score i wud definitely give you 97.. very well done
2007-06-23 21:54:39 · answer #10 · answered by raineyen 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋