How's this novel story?

Question

A teenager in the French Quarter falls in a mystical world & is led by a simple girl to find the 4 mystical orbs of the elements to form a sacred key which will take him back home & forever close the door between hell & earth. The issue is a demonic warrior get this his name is christian, wishes also to capture the orbs & use them to enter our world releasing satin's army of demonic creatures to plunge our world into an eternal deep sleep of cold darkness or in a way hell freezing over.

I'm still working on the idea the idea you see is a rough start off...advice is appreciated.

Answer 1

Sounds like it will be quite the mistical adventure that will have several awe inspiring events and sceneries. I believe that I may be able to help. How about for a brief momnet when the orbs are collected, having one or more of you charicters entering Heaven for a brief period. Here is what I think Heaven is like and you can use this in your story if you like:

Now imagine yourself materializing into another realm/plain of existence beyond what we can detect in our mortal reality. When entering (Naturally as an angel), you feel totally weightless (With no pressure anywhere not even on your feet as if you are freely levitating in outer-space with total control over where you want to go "knowing that no harm of any kind will ever come to you", and being able to move at any speed, in any direction you wish, with still feeling no pressure). You then feel an infinite number of different emotions that are so mysterious and beautiful that are far beyond anything that we can even begin to imagine in our mortal realm. You then realize that you are totally cleaned of all evil thoughts, pain, etc. You also feel as if you are made entirely of the tingling sensation (A lot like the one you get when your foot's asleep), and feeling as if their is an infinite number of beams of pure white light going through your entire spiritual essence from all angles at all times. This would make one feel truly free/refreshed throughout every fiber of their spiritual being. Also being able to experience a countless number of nothing but awe inspiring sounds, positive/enlightening thoughts, sights/images, emotions, etc. Then you realize that you are hearing, seeing, etc, a complex mixture of all the positive/heavenly experiences of everyone their (Including yourself), so that every angel truly knows each others positives inside and out, without question (Both from their mortal lives and lives they are living in heaven). The visual sights/environment in Heaven would be a mixture of every ones positive experiences, thoughts and so on with everyone having true 360 vision (Sights/images beyond our mortal imaginations I am sure). You then feel as if you are truly a part of an infinite all knowing knowledge (Truly without question, being at one with God and everyone else their), feeling as if you are a part of a truly loving/pure, ever expanding consciousness (One massive mind of seemingly never ending knowledge that is continuously growing). Within this realm/Heaven everyone their will feel truly 100% whole/cleansed for all time...Is this what Heaven is really like??!!!...I guess only time will tell.......

I have several other wonders to share that you may be able incorporate into your story (About what this mystical world can look like within the "What Is Heaven truly like" blog) and you can feel free to use any of my works if you like:
http://360.yahoo.com/blorm_multaeeneea_lavacom
and best of luck with your novel in trying to open others imaginations to a world of endless possibilities!!

Answer 2

Character 1: How about Piper Rose? Character 2: How about Trey Matthew? Character 3: How about Gavin Jacob? Last Names for Willow: Willow Hightower Willow Voegel Willow Sutton Willow Maclaine Willow Aston ♥ ♥

Answer 3

If this "simple girl" knows where the orbs are why doesn't she collect the Orbs and save the world?

The plot has generally been done to death.

Answer 4

Regardless if the plot is well-used or not, continue writing it because the experience in qualified English grammar, punctuation, and spelling will test your skills.

Most writers that I know about will write well regardless what forum in which they are communicating. Writing skills are lacking on this Yahoo! Answers site and you are contributing to it through the lack of good punctuation, sentence flow, and grammar.

But continue with your novel. It will be an experience for you.

Answer 5

Sounds pretty good keep working, it needs a bit of tweeking. Good luck

Answer 6

"Novel" wouldn't be my first choice to describe it. If it interests you, go ahead with it, but I feel I've already read it before.