battle of little big horn poem...?

Question

Hi, I just wrote this poem cos its my history hwk. It is based on the events of the Battle of Little Big Horn, and i was just wondering wat u guys think. i would be grateful of anythin, good, bad or contructive - i'm just curious so criticise away!

The Battle of Little Big Horn



Near the Little Big Horn river
A battle would soon take place,
With death, blood, bows and arrows
Surely no-one would lose face

General Custer marched his troops
Up and down the hills till nigh
They walked, marched, hiked and trudged
To where the Indians lie

Sitting Bull consulted the spirits
With the Sun dance performed with gore
He had a premonition
Of a victory all would awe

When the Indian camp was spotted
No warriors were in sight
General Custer thought it would be easy
He thought there would be no fight

The General had made an assumption
One that he would regret
For the warriors were sleeping
And the Americans would soon be met

The 7th cavalry was split in four
Some with every leader
With Custer, Reno, Benteen and Calhoun
The troops went off in order

Without knowledge of the position
Or the tribes population and size
Reno led the first attack
And was met with angry cries

A retreat was unavoidable
After many soldiers died
But that was not the end of blood shed
Because next Custer tried

He could not cross the river
The bank was soggy and wet
The horses were sinking and annoyed
And the Americans now were met


The Indians advanced on the soldiers
And the soldiers did the same
Guns were fired, arrows drawn
As the battle now became

Soon panic and fear took over
And it was clear they could not win
For the Indians were stronger
Than they have ever been

As men from both sides fell
The Indians still kept coming
For they were fighting for their lives
But the Americans were retreating

General Custer was brutally killed
With 5 arrows in his torso
He fell beside the American flag
That was the American’s deathblow

That battle had been lost
The Indians had won
The Americans were terrified
But the war had just begun


By Jessica Chandler

Answer 1

NICE ONE! welldone
i'm glad I took the time to find it and read it.

Answer 2

Jessica, well done! You've done your research in the history of the Custer Fight, commonly called by the Indians, "The Greasy-Grass Fight."

As you know, Custer wore the rank of a brevet major general, but his active duty rank was a lieutenant colonel (O5).
In your poem the word general is not to be capitalized unless the name Custer follows it.

I believe your poem needs proper punctuation to make it complete. Again, your research shows in the poem of the battle that took place on 25 June 1876 on a Saturday morn.

Answer 3

some of your facts are wrong. other than that OK. it was on a Sunday, June 25th. Custer was not killed with arrows but a wound to his chest and another probably later to the head.

Answer 4

Counter-centennial means the poem was written in opposition to the 100 year celebration of whatever work was done prior to it. It's a protest.

Answer 5

GREAT JOB JC, the effort you put into this, the interest you showed is worth an "A". If I were your teacher I would be extremely pleased to have a student in my class that was there to learn, like you.

Answer 6

Good job!! Poetic and historically accurate. I like it!!

Chow!!