To love is the greatest act
To lose it is the greatest loss
To live is the greatest gift
To live well will surely cost
Love will drive you in sane
Love will take away pain
It will torture you
Again and again
Especially if its in vain
Love has no prejudice
It doesn’t pick or choose
Anyone can play the game
As long as your willing to lose
Its sad how something so lovely
Can become so utterly dark
The lack of love is frightening
It will surely break your heart.
2007-06-19 17:59:07 · 15 answers · asked by Kate 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
No, sorry.
Need to work on your spelling too.
2007-06-19 18:46:32 · answer #1 · answered by Gaspode 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's very sweet, but I think the reactions you got were about content and form.
Your poem doesn't lend any insight into the act of loving, nor does it give us much insight into the problem of losing...both of which your poem strives to address.
Saying all that, it's very sweet for what it is, but having said that, that's it. It doesn't shed any light on universal concerns.
I'm sorry. That's how I read it.
2007-06-20 01:39:49 · answer #2 · answered by margot 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Besides some minor problems (lack of clarity and flow), it was enlightening and i couldn't have agreed more. You managed to present a cruel reality in a objective yet positive way, not depressing me. Brilliant!!!
2007-06-20 08:30:27 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
no poetry is supposed to be a snapshot - using words to make a picture - like capturing a memory - like a photograph - not some outpouring of feelings - this poem is terrible, it's just a bunch of gobbledygook - it isn't organized - it isn't brief - it isn't like capturing a moment - it's just all this stuff you think and feel, it's awful. That's not what poetry is about
2007-06-20 02:03:01 · answer #4 · answered by art_flood 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you started good but then went bad, what happened?good try though, but i don't think living well cost you anything other than love. Oh and some spelling you wanna check: insane ( not in sane), it's ( not its)
2007-06-20 02:57:28 · answer #5 · answered by mimi247t 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No amount of sappy words
will excuse a lack of meter and rhyme
If it doesn't work, it's not poetry.
2007-06-20 01:51:51 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's the most cliche thing I've ever read.
[i just pulled a simon cowell]
2007-06-20 04:30:18 · answer #7 · answered by Jackson A 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good in its own way. Its lacking rhythm, but you can feel the emotion in it.
2007-06-20 02:54:01 · answer #8 · answered by Kim Possible;; 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Maybe too simple and too rytmical, like a nursery rhyme, but it's not too bad, I sort of like it.
2007-06-20 01:34:48 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the poem but hope you don't really feel that way about love.
2007-06-20 01:46:51 · answer #10 · answered by danthesellinman 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋