In the darkness of night
The waves of the ocean carry you away
The moon shines above and you gently sway
Out in the open you choose not to hide
Instead, you look to the sky
In the stars you confide
2007-06-19 16:50:10 · 7 answers · asked by SnowWhite92 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
as a fellow poet, i think it's beautiful. I think you should post Poetry on www.postpoems.com. It's a free service where you can post poems you write,as well as read poetry from other members and you can critique each other. I have a lot of mine posted there and got a lot of feedback. Maybe you could consider that.
2007-06-19 17:29:13 · answer #1 · answered by Miss Understood 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
To me this poem represents a person who has a secret that no one else knows about. As long as no one elso knows, this person is at peace with themselves. They like the fact of whatever thier secret is. I'm sure you have heard the saying 'it's between them and GOD'. This poem represents just that. What others don't know, won't hurt them. This person seems to like the fact that they have something to hide. They are confident that no one will ever find out. I really like this poem. It can be taken in so many different ways!!
2007-06-20 00:04:10 · answer #2 · answered by acracker269 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's a nice poem but doesn't make a lot of sense -
poetry is not - pouring out your feelings
poetry is - like taking a photograph - only using words to capture the moment.
it was nice the way you tried to do this - it has potential, but needs help to make it work better.
2007-06-20 02:23:09 · answer #3 · answered by art_flood 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a very sweet poem. keep up the good work &one day you can have a book of all kinds of poems
2007-06-19 23:58:51 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
a little bit short,but it's nice.
2007-06-19 23:56:43 · answer #5 · answered by Gardenia 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its pretty good.
2007-06-19 23:59:45 · answer #6 · answered by lucky27 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice, i like it.
2007-06-19 23:58:38 · answer #7 · answered by Brandon W 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋