Stand Up
What's wrong with the kids today?
That's what us old farts always say
But, really, where is YOUR energy?
Why are you so disconnected
So content in your apathy?
"When I was your age..." we old hippies complain
We were storming the campus
"We Won't Get Fooled Again"
We were burning our draft cards
Or marching or shouting
Now see us old farts
Just rocking and pouting
Because the world became what we once feared
But now we're too tired, or just plain ol' skeered
Of losing our pensions
We sold out to "the man"
And became The Establishment
And in our middle-years
We have grown wan
What's wrong with you kids today?
Don't you just know??
To be quiet now
Won't help America grow
Towards Peace and Compassion
2007-06-19 15:04:57 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I really like this, It made me think, and now days if somethings makes me step back and take a minute to say "let me ponder on that for a moment" I totally respect that. Great write.
2007-06-19 17:40:50 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
The flower grows, blooms, shares its beauty with the world, fades, and passes away. Thus it may also be said of the Flower Children of yesterday, sad to say.
Perhaps today's younger generation will have pleasant surprises for us one day. In any case, the future is theirs to shape in whatever way they will.
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2007-06-20 19:49:32 · answer #2 · answered by BlueFeather 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
cardinal rule of poetry (and my personal favorite since I learned to follow it): Show, Don't Tell!! So rephrase the entire poem (well the sentimate at least) to make images that express the same emotions. good luck!
2007-06-19 22:10:45 · answer #3 · answered by ! 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with answer #1 -
also it has a lot of potential if you cleaned it up.
can you find another word besides farts?
it isn't very poetic.
2007-06-20 02:26:16 · answer #4 · answered by art_flood 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The thought of it is fantastic, but you can make it much more power full, I want to hear this poem said aloud, because it has alot of potential...
GOOD WRITE!
2007-06-19 22:11:08 · answer #5 · answered by Black Mamba 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hey there nth wrong with kids today :( they just arnt brought up right
2007-06-20 06:15:07 · answer #6 · answered by ILOVEU 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Um...is this a question or poem??? well, i guess it is good, but im a teenager. sooo....i don't think we are all that clueless as adults think we are or stuff. sometime there r teens out there that are lazy and clueless. but now....idk, anway, it is a good writting tho:D
2007-06-19 22:31:54 · answer #7 · answered by keepingupappearences 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I did not like it. I left way before the end.
2007-06-19 22:30:03 · answer #8 · answered by johnfarber2000 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
beautifully wrote!!!i can see lots of compassion..but it needs more energy and it is lack of substance.i like it a lot because it is instilled with emotions and thoughts.u did good kid...
2007-06-19 22:19:00 · answer #9 · answered by ferfly 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I didn't sell out, I bought in!
2007-06-19 22:13:23 · answer #10 · answered by johnnizanni 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋