i wrote this poem over the weekend, i didn't actually do what this poem says. it just poped in my mind so i had to write it. tell me what you think.
Result
Shut your eyes now
Don't you dare cry
I'm kissing you one last time
To many bruses I have to cover
To many times you made me shudder
You made me wonder
How could I let you do this
Causing fear with unforgiven lust
I step back from you and watch the tears fly
I lean over and wisper sweet nothings
Thats what you are to me now
With your hands tied and your legs bound
I cover your eyes
For thats the onl thing I couldn't resist
Your stare and your lips
The gun in my hand feels like it weighs a ton
I raise it up as I become numb
One tear escapes my raging eye
As I pull the trigger
I can't hear you cry
Well tell me what you think
2007-06-18 03:44:37 · 9 answers · asked by Blackcat 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Wow. that's amazing. I wish I could write like that. Is that based on something real?
2007-06-18 03:47:55 · answer #1 · answered by lizzy loves life. 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow!! i think you need to start thinking more Postive. And No, i didn't care for this poem at all.
2007-06-18 10:50:59 · answer #2 · answered by justmenothinelse 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
umm... well i liked it untill you got to the gun part and about him tied up. otherwise it is good i just dont like the fact that you killed someone in it
2007-06-18 10:49:41 · answer #3 · answered by ♥愛♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Morose,gloomily, sullen.
2007-06-18 10:53:01 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well if your committing suicide or killing him it is great but it is still sad eat-her way
2007-06-18 10:50:02 · answer #5 · answered by marsh 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow, thats pretty morbid, and we're all VERY glad that u didnt actually do that!! ;) its good! i like it!
2007-06-18 10:48:13 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you must be a jolly person
2007-06-18 10:47:30 · answer #7 · answered by luckford2004 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
depressing....but talented
2007-06-18 10:47:52 · answer #8 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think it is good.
2007-06-18 10:48:19 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋