In memory of my dad, i wrote this today.
A Letter to my Dad.
Dad, I want to tell you how much it hurt
That you where never there, when I needed you
So much pain and agony, I felt dismay
In silence tears rolled down night and day
I know you loved me, I felt it in my heart
Your unorthodox manners and simple ways
That Sunday walk in the park, the month of May
Those sweet memories never go away
It was hard to understand, why you were not home
It was mystifying and yet I somehow knew
That those special moments between you and I
Will be there with me, as I grew up
Memories flash till today, seeing you at school
Unaware of your presence, watching from afar
Carrying on, jumping, screaming having tons of fun
You must’ve love me to see me smile
One day, you left without saying good-bye
It hurt so badly, I almost cried
“He’s gone,” I kept saying in my little mind
I had to go home and tell my mom
I know you are in heaven, watching over me
I have felt your presence, in moments of despair
I hope some day I can hug you again and again
Dad, I just wouldn’t have it any other way!
2007-06-17 09:38:31 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
thanks for your comments.
Cathy, yes you can use it. let me know what effects has on the kids.
2007-06-17 09:48:06 · update #1
Well, its a good poem but its sad, and a bit forced so it doesn't flow very well, but very touching :(
2007-06-17 09:42:18 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm very sorry for your loss and I'm touched by your eulogy in poetic form. It isn't exactly a poem, but I'm not going to analyze it now, on such a day. Still, you DO convey your feelings of loss and sadness and your hope for eventual reconciliation with your father. All my hope goes with yours at this moment.
2007-06-17 16:45:56 · answer #2 · answered by Elaine P...is for Poetry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nicely written. Sounds from the heart.... i am a therapist, may i use this for groups? i think the kids i work with may connect to it.
2007-06-17 16:42:49 · answer #3 · answered by cat 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it was really heartfelt..you can tell by the way you wrote it. i'm sorry that you lost your dad, but i know that one day you'll see him again and just know that he's with you always, in your heart. and that he's never really left you.
2007-06-19 14:34:31 · answer #4 · answered by lovelylady_79 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i really liked it, but the last two stanzas didn't flow very well, mainly the last one....with some work i think it could be really great! well done!
2007-06-17 16:48:33 · answer #5 · answered by ludo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its touching, i teared up a but, and yet it doesn flow. fix that, and ull have a powerful poem.
2007-06-17 16:46:42 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very touching!!!
2007-06-17 16:42:31 · answer #7 · answered by KandiiBabii 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋