hey!
I've just written a poem and i wanted to see what you think?
its called
Beauty lays beneath the eyes
Beauty is the key to a soul
to open our eyes never to let go
inner beauty is where the truth lies,to see a heart that will never die.
Beauty lays beneath the eyes understand the reasons why,
a special world for you and me,a special bond no one can ever see.
I believe this love will never end the connections we have the sparks they send.
Beneath these eyes there lays true beauty,if you weren't there my heart would be empty.
thanks x
2007-06-16 14:24:20 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
XxsarahxX you are beauty, and the beauty comes from your heart, Always keep this pure untarnished spirit in you.
2007-06-17 09:22:07 · answer #1 · answered by denis9705 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW!!! That's AWESOME!!! And you're only 13???? You've got quite a talent there at such a young age. Good for you! Just some formatting that I did to make it look nice. The words are still yours...
Beauty Lays Beneath The Eyes
Beauty is the key to a soul
To open our eyes never to let go.
Inner beauty is where the truth lies
To see a heart that will never die.
Beauty lays beneath the eyes.
To understand the reasons why...
A special world for you and me,
A special bond no one can ever see.
I believe this love will never end,
The connections we have, the sparks they send.
Beneath these eyes there lays true beauty;
If you weren't there my heart would be empty.
2007-06-17 00:42:43 · answer #2 · answered by blueskies 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem for early love.
Don't understand the line that says..."Beauty lays beneath the eyes..."
Maybe behind the eyes. Beneath the eyes is cheek bone. Can't find anything to connect the area to love or endearment.
But, good luck. There is some emotion behind the thought words.
2007-06-16 21:39:21 · answer #3 · answered by bushtender 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow... I really liked that
Check mine out if you want go to www.poetry.com and search Victoria Colwell Hopkins...My poem is called Until The End but i like yours more..you should submit it!
<3 Vickee
2007-06-16 21:30:34 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
It's lovely...i especially like the last verse:
I believe this love will never end, the connections we have the sparks they send....
well done xx : x )
2007-06-16 22:20:18 · answer #5 · answered by ;) 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow thats really great! And your only 13, thats amazing. Keep it up!
2007-06-17 17:46:38 · answer #6 · answered by Will S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well,considering that you're only 13,that's really very good-well done!
2007-06-16 22:18:26 · answer #7 · answered by Moofunk 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's fantastic. and even better, i'm not the only 13 year old who writes poetry!! huray for us!!! lol keep writin x
2007-06-17 05:26:23 · answer #8 · answered by country gal 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is good art, flows nice, readable...you get an A.
2007-06-16 21:28:47 · answer #9 · answered by TD Euwaite? 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Thats beautiful hun. And so so true. xxx
2007-06-17 10:59:06 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋