Recognizable abhoration
in
shallow depths
of furtive glances- called love
Drips saccharine
of falicy
satiating anxious ears
Inciting fear
combusting spontaneously
all in one breath
What do you think it's about?
Does it make any sense to you?
2007-06-16 07:19:58 · 8 answers · asked by Still*Perfect 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
And I can never understand why it does bring "fear," as love is a fantastic feeling. We all may be hurt in some way in its pursuit, but who ever said that something so wonderful is easy to come by.
The wannabe critics may take aim at something - that's what wannabes do - but it's your feelings, your words and they convey a message. Great job.
2007-06-16 07:35:01 · answer #1 · answered by Zombie Birdhouse 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A few big words in a poem can enhance your emotion and feeling but i think you over did it. You used too many big words and there was not much feeling into the poem. I didnt understand what this was about. Maybe if I had a dictionary with me it would help but again, it still would not make the poem profound. You have a very cool vocabulary though. Work on it...
2007-06-16 14:40:33 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like. But it sounds too choppy. Do you know why you used line breaks so frequently. Good poets know why, so ask yourself.
Also, it looks like to tried to use as many "long words" as possible. There isn't too much emotion behind what you're saying.
2007-06-16 14:30:05 · answer #3 · answered by Brigitte 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
What comes to mind when I read this was" beauty" .Asking the question ,is it skin deep or just on the surface.Do you believe in Love at first sight,is it physical or all in ones mind???
2007-06-16 14:37:49 · answer #4 · answered by DONNA G 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes it does make sense and I really like it show feeling and emotion.
2007-06-17 05:55:10 · answer #5 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
LOVE IT! you shoud definatly be a poet.. you have a talent!!! it has so much emotion!
2007-06-16 15:12:40 · answer #6 · answered by ddcgdancer23 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
kind of hard to grasp your style, but i reminds me of an orgasm.
2007-06-16 14:31:01 · answer #7 · answered by Sirius 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
funny
2007-06-16 14:33:00 · answer #8 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋