Here is my first poem of the day and maybe my last. Comments welcome?

Question

It has come to my attention that certain people on this site believe my interaction with Kayde to be something other than plutonic. Sorry to disappoint you all, but my taste runs only for my wife. I've been married 26 years and I find it truly sad that just because I try to help someone with their writing I would be villified like this. I have been totally honest about my abuse and would never put anyone else through that. to all of you who believe this...shame on you. Don't project your own sick fantasies onto me

Mine

You can try to take my mind,
even attempt to steal me blind,
but one thing you will never get,
Is something I call self respect.

I've been through hell and made it back,
I'll make it through these vile attacks,
maybe for all who choose to believe,
I'll just pack up and take my leave.

I never asked for any sympathy,
maybe just a little empathy.
I guess I asked for too much indeed,
my heart, your hand, .I too bleed.

I would never hurt a child

Answer 1

I don't think you should stop because of the opinions of a small few, but if that's what will make you feel most comfortable...so be it.

As far as the poem, I honestly think its your best work yet. Its very direct, conveys a uniform feeling, and doesn't overstate the point.

Keep up the good work...on or off the net

Answer 2

Well Steve, I would never ever think such things about your relationship with Kayde. I think whoever would even suggest such a thing is just trying to cause trouble. It's ridiculous. Maybe without thinking of the true implications someone is just being amused by saying those things. But I doubt anyone who is a serious person would draw any conclusion other than you're a friendly nice person. That has certainly been my impression.

Answer 3

Can't tell you this from my mouth
so this is my way to let it out
I read this poem, really emotional
I'll tell you this... this is sensational.

I know you would never hurt a child, I can tell, you just trying to help, no poet, me, you, Kayde, an all here in Y/A are perfect, we have sometimes moment to correct mistakes.

I know she'll understand, you love your wife and nobody will change that. Shame to those who believe the contrary of it.

That's why I'm here my undercover poet, to protect you as an angel that I am.

The angel of San Juan forever.
Marilyn

Answer 4

Steve, listen to me it looks as if it's an unanimous vote. The people have spoken dude. Don't leave and don't give up on something that is truly important to you. Look, everyone has to express themselves somehow and you were blessed with a talent to write poetry. You have the ability to influence people through your writings so don't give up. Want to make a difference in the world? Continue to write. It's that simple. Express yourself to your heart's content and don't let anyone and I mean anyone stop you. Dude you can make a difference and you can make something positive out of something that's negative but, it's up to you to do it. You're the only one who can decide. The rest of us, we have spoken our votes and it looks as though you would be greatly missed if you choose to leave so, why not reconsider and stay a bit longer? You truly do have talent and skill when it comes to writing poetry and self expression is something we all have the ability to do so, don't let anyone steal that away from you. Got it? Keep writing!!!

Answer 5

It has a band of brothers form experience skakespeare vibe. this is not any longer a foul poem. Alot of the words you employ like foray, fray are french norman in foundation. i might have maybe enjoyed extra Anglo Saxon foundation words to offer it a extra norse vibe. 'Ezra pound' has some Norse poems that try this with iambic pentameter.

Answer 6

I like it.

This is what people have to realize about the generation coming up: they're way more self-centric than anyone. She's a little absorbed, and will hopefully look back on this 13th year and realize that she invested a little too much emotion on this very virtual outlet.

Answer 7

I concur on that last line, never hurt a child. Great rhyming skills. Hope you are feeling much better now that you have let out all the steam?

Answer 8

I love your poem. It shows that you have a great amount of self respect, and you won't let anyone bring you down. No matter what they do. Whoever thinks that, (what you said at top), is very mean.
They should quit spreading lies about you.
:)
kara

Answer 9

You should know by now that I continue to support and admire both of you, each in your own way.

I have no friends in "real life" so it distresses me to see strife among my Cyber Friends.

I am glad to see the discord being dissipated.
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Answer 10

It's beautiful. I'm sure there are people out there who can probably relate to this. Good luck expressing your feelings and writing. I think you should continue.