What do u think of this poem I wrote for a girl in Texas. I am in NM.?

Question

Lost Heart
Did I leave my heart in Texas? How shall I get it back? I feel this emptiness deep in my soul. An emptiness as deep and dark as the furthest abyss. What will fill this void? Did I leave my heart in Texas? Is it you that has my reason for living, my warmth, my shelter, my love. It may have been found and not a moment too soon. Can u hear it? It beats strongest when I am speaking with the one who wields it. If the sound resonates off your ear, then it is surely you who has my heart. The sun is setting on me and the darkness inside of me is cold, shiver inducing, and I feel as if it could consume me. A girl, a beautiful girl, with a mind so pure and a heart that beats to rhythm of perfection. No such thing as perfection? In the opinion of whom? A life under the thundering waves is perfect for sea creatures yet impossible for man.

The arid environment of the desert is perfect for the lonesome cactus yet the beautiful rose with its protective thorns is short lived. The one who protects my heart has a safe haven in my arms. This girl, this angel of the earth, she may have found it and not a moment too soon. I would go as far as it takes to find the angel who has my hopeful heart. Protect it and nurture it, this well inside me must be replenished before the anxious heart’s vessel becomes one with the earth and the heart’s beating slowly drips away to a hush.

Answer 1

if's she is a Texas girl, she will love it. Sounds more like a love balad and Texas guy's are'nt that creative.

Answer 2

Pretty good for a non-rhymer.