flipping through the old scrapbook,
trying to remember those days of freedom,
running through the sprinklers,
laying down in the grass,
side by side,
your hand holding mine,
watching the clouds,
but really gazing at you.
flipping the page,
seeing us again,
sitting on the couch,
my head on your shoulder,
your arm around me,
fighting back the fear,
protecting me from harm,
our first "i love you"s.
pictures so sweet,
us so happy,
inside slightly growing apart,
more and more pages,
less and less of you,
showing the drift,
but i can still remember that first "i love you".
2007-06-14 14:33:34 · 14 answers · asked by iANNA! 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Excellent! It is fabulous!!! Great thread to it, and fanatstic visuals!!!! I am a Writer...published, and I can tell you itis one I would read again and again!!!
Cheers!
Mistress Elizza Lioncourt
2007-06-22 12:55:26 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. It makes me wax nostalgic. A lot of emotion in very few words. Nice work!
2007-06-14 21:37:40 · answer #2 · answered by Firespider 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Actually Its really good. I could be there!! It sounds like a real life story...I really LOVED IT!!! KEEP up the good work !!!
2007-06-14 21:38:26 · answer #3 · answered by rhoda 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! long and amazing poem! no need to worry. You are perfect at writing!
2007-06-14 21:38:18 · answer #4 · answered by Aqua 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Amazing...man, i wish i had some talent haha, you should put it in a magazine or something!
2007-06-22 17:31:15 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is very sweet and lovely..I like it.
2007-06-14 21:38:00 · answer #6 · answered by Countess Bathory 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
personally, i like rhyming poems (luuv dr. suess) but ur's is very good. kinda sad. but it makes me happy too. i wish love worked better.
2007-06-14 21:37:36 · answer #7 · answered by Sucre Noir 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its good! Its nice.I could picture what was happening in my head as i read it.
2007-06-14 21:39:36 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was sweet and it made sense! good work-
2007-06-14 21:37:25 · answer #9 · answered by nquizativ1 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How about this?
Today i will eat a pops tart and then i will fart i think you're pretty smart.
2007-06-14 21:37:12 · answer #10 · answered by L 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋