I feel like Im missing something..
Beyond the dirt and dust swirling out the window B knew her future depended on her ability to remain strong. Breaking into this vacation villa was still scary for her, she had to fight her fears of the police finding her just to get two hours of sleep. She knew better than to fight the feeling of icicles poking through her flesh, like nausea it seemed to flow through her body like a drug. Rising slowly the room screamed at her, “you have to get a hold of whatever has a hold of yourself B.” Hearing her own voice reminded her of who she would rather be hearing. B slowly reclined imagining his face the first time they met, how it was a strange reflection of how she felt. Every time she dreamed of him she imagined the times they had made love which seemed to be all rolled into one time, one place, one feeling. Blindfolded she was sure she would know the touch of his finger amongst 10,000 men and she didn't have to tell him that, he knew.
2007-06-14 10:48:26 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I recently watched a Q&A with J.K. (miss harry potter), John Irving, and Stephen King about writing. One of the things that surprised me was taht John Irving said he always writes his ending first (down to the last sentance) so he has a goal to work for.
He write th ending and then a simple outline working backwards to give his work a rough structure. This may work for you!?
2007-06-14 11:14:03 · answer #1 · answered by Ralph 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your story is great. Beautifully written. I love it. But, I was a little confused. You definitely need a setting. Describe "him" a little more. Why was he brought into the story? Is he linked to what she is going through now?
p.s. it's not good to put your writing on the net unless its copyrighted. you could ask a family member, a teacher, librarian, etc. Someone you can trust.
But otherwise you're story is great. I love your choice of words.
2007-06-14 11:03:49 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow sounds like a great start to me keep going with the story line and get into the detail so that we can see it happening in our minds
2007-06-14 10:59:41 · answer #3 · answered by hdf69 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good, very descriptive. You're missing setting/description. You have to introduce your character before you delve into their memories/fears/inhibitions.
2007-06-14 10:54:14 · answer #4 · answered by skaur1290 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. Thats good. I can't really tell you what you need, cuz I suck at writing, but I still think its good. Sorry I can't help.
2007-06-14 11:07:34 · answer #5 · answered by BabyGirl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Do they have to make love?? What's his name? What sounds is she hearing?
2007-06-14 10:54:59 · answer #6 · answered by antidestablishmentarianismdude 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good luck
2007-06-14 10:55:20 · answer #7 · answered by Packerfan22 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋