my poems
locked inside her heart
a pain she'll refuse to tell
incomplete without him
just an empty shell
still he walks right past her
head held high with pride
To end her pain she make a choice
tonight she'll try suicide
2007-06-12 09:43:41 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
this is about a friend of mine. the story this poem tells is true and my friend did succeed.
2007-06-12 09:54:45 · update #1
hence the last sentence
2007-06-12 09:55:03 · update #2
It's very good and also very sad.
2007-06-12 09:56:37 · answer #1 · answered by Cindy 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
A good poem. It sounds like it would make a great song too.
2007-06-12 16:46:41 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Love it. Except the last sentence. Tonight, no more sacrifice.
2007-06-12 16:46:09 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
everything but the last sentence
was good keep up the great work
2007-06-12 16:51:59 · answer #4 · answered by ♥Saw Dust♥ 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
it tells much in just a small poem
2007-06-12 16:48:18 · answer #5 · answered by The brat 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Oooo just love it.
You are going to be a great poet.
2007-06-12 16:47:38 · answer #6 · answered by Aquamarine 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It's good
2007-06-12 16:49:10 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it but dont use suicide it's too obvious and boring
2007-06-12 16:50:25 · answer #8 · answered by mandy w 2 · 1⤊ 2⤋
nice writing
very depressing theme
hope this isn't based on yourself or anybody you know
2007-06-12 16:47:16 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I relate to it. Believe me.
2007-06-12 16:48:20 · answer #10 · answered by LivingDeadKat 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋